Help me finish this song please????

Question

i need help with finishing this song, here's what I got:

why do i mess it all up, too much crack just sucks
too many beers so many queers
spinning in my head, waking up dead
please just leave me alone in my vomit

if your lyrics are good enough i will add it to my song

I'm in a country band.... seriously

Answer 1

I will dwell in my sorrow, hangover tomorrow
Nothing matters anymore
Quit staring at me, shut the door.

Answer 2

To be honest, your lyrics ain't tthat good, I think you should rewrite the song with something a lil more happy and each line doesn't have to rhyme for the song, it would sound more like a poetry than a song if every line you write rhymes, just make the song meaningful, you don't really have to make it rhyme sentence by sentence, it's just hard to make it rhyme and when you sing it or play it out, it's not gonna sound that good than songs that have meanings and perfect cut ins(like pauses at some places and with chorus and lyrics that are special in one way, special in your own way). Good Luck!

Answer 3

Dude! Don't listen to people saying they are not good! Thats like personal disrespect! I think they are fine. I wish I could add something, but I'm only creative 1/4 of the time. Lol.

Answer 4

why do i mess it all up, too much crack just sucks
too many beers so many queers
spinning in my head, waking up wishing i were dead
please just leave me alone in my vomit
just walk away and don't look back
look to your future not the past
You desrve better than me
don't let me drag you down here just to be beside me
you've got the whole world just for the asking
take it all in and never look back
hold your head high when you walk down the street
you don't need to look down at anyones feet
just walk away and don't look back
look to your future not the past
You desrve better than me
don't let me drag you down here just to be beside me

Answer 5

i cant get away from it all
the pain is too intense
this all just doesn't make sense
another good time, gone all to waste
just for that little taste

why do i mess it all up, too much crack, it just sucks

too many bars, stealing too many cars
it just isn't worth it
it just isn't worth it

this pain is too intense
just give me a hit,
a beer,
praying to the porcelain god.



sorry. that's all i got :)

Answer 6

why do i mess it all up,
too much crack can just sucks
too many beers-
so many queers-
i'm spinning in my head,
while i am waking up dead
please just leave me alone

forever-
traped inside myself
and never-
will i let my self forget
though the pain makes me cry inside
i just turn my head and hide
my many faces scream at me
that i dont remember

Answer 7

My vomit its really gross you can see it on my coat! I am drunk and I mean it, love to go to bed but I have to work! So many weird doos it hurts! Help me out of here, take me down. You look to me like a clown!

Answer 8

dont want to cry
just want to die
run through the fields
play with the deer
whispher in my ear
lie on the grass smoke some hash
go through the dash
now its time for the flash

Answer 9

i cant add anything im not very creative but i would change the "crack just sucks" that and "queers" ruin your song....country singers swear but its like a*s and sh*t those words are too bare for ppl if you were a rapper it would be different!

Answer 10

I want to suck your dick, but my mouth is closed shut
twisted inside from the torment of this acid
It seeps into my brain, making me go insane
Just as I hammer another nail into my coffin

Answer 11

Da Da Da Wo Wo Wo