i wrote this 1 for a guy who i really like, but he's afraid of getting into a relation, probably afraid of failure and pain...
If Only he knows!
If only he knows...
The pain his love caused
The feelings I cannot hold
How much he impresses me
And how much he's cold!
He's like a talking piece of ice
Doesn't matter to him all my sighs
All my sleepless nights
It's like a love from one side
Torturing me from deep inside
All the feelings I can't fight
He just doesn't care about
He says "I am not ready..."
The road is long already...
In the end nothing to see
But pain for you and me
We will be going to nowhere
There would be nothing for us there
All I could do is shed a tear
filled with love, passion and fear
I will be a lonely bird
Flying in the atmosphere
I will wait for you
That's a promise my dear :)
Don't criticize too hard people! :P
2006-07-03 23:29:10 · 20 answers · asked by Drowned in English! 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Amazing you should become a song writer cause you'll make it big, i mean it.
2006-07-19 07:07:09 · answer #1 · answered by ... 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
if I was a guy and a girl wrote me a poem and I wasn't in highschool, I would kind of be weirded out. If the guy you like, likes poems and stuff like that then maybe it's okay, but if I was him then I don't think a poem would be the best way to go about it.
The poem itself sounds like you are pushing way way too hard. The beginning when you reference cold and torturing you, you make him sound like he is so mean. Are you really going to give this too him because the beginning sounds like you are mad at him. It's not till the end that we kind of see your caring side. Try to not take such a direct approach, you can't force him to like you, so why try and force it into your poem. Work your way into him like you would to gain trust from someone perhaps the poem would be better if you went something like
Time apparently isn't ready
You say neither are you
I sit content with my thoughts all day
because I'm still dreaming of you
Friends for now , that's fine and all
In the future though
I may still want to ask
Perhaps if you have reconsidered
a growing relationship unlike in the past
Later I hope we can be together
a couple hand in hand
if you do not forsee this though
I still can understand
I write this poem for you
the one that I adore
Just to let you know
I'm thinking about you
even more
You can go ahead and use it if you want, I write these all the time, but try not to sound too forcefull or you might drive him away even more. good luck
2006-07-04 06:47:43 · answer #2 · answered by Kiko 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
People say they 'find' love, as if it were an object hidden by a rock. But love takes many forms, and it is never the same for any man and woman. What people find then is a certain love.
Love, like rain, can nourish from above, drenching couples with a soaking joy. But sometimes, under the angry heat of life, love dries on the surface and must nourish from below, tending to its roots, keeping itself alive.
Lost love is still love. It takes a different form, that's all. You can't see their smile or bring them food or tousle their hair or move them around a dance floor. But when those senses weaken, another heightens. Memory. Memory becomes your partner. You nurture it. You hold it. You dance with it.
2006-07-12 23:02:13 · answer #3 · answered by Princess illusion 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No offense but it would scare me away, try and make it light and funny and you should have better luck. Think along the lines of a funny valentines card, that will break the ice a lot easier.
2006-07-04 06:34:52 · answer #4 · answered by Peter R 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dont beg. Guys like to chase, not be chased. The less you look for love the sooner it will find you.
It is a very beautiful poem.
2006-07-04 08:41:28 · answer #5 · answered by CYNDIITA 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very beautiful, very expressive and very touching. This poem is very good. The pain in it is very easy to understand and yet so complicated.
Amazing.
2006-07-04 06:41:50 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
May be he is just too stupid to realise how special you are. But most guys are scared of getting into a relationship, so he is no exception.
2006-07-04 06:34:55 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
omg.....It touched me. It is one of the best poems I have ever read. Seriously, it is. I can feel exactly what you are trying to say, and that's what makes a great poem. I love it! Please write more, it is inspiring to the rest of us out here.
2006-07-04 06:37:21 · answer #8 · answered by Socastee_Angel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
see first of all its my pleasure to give u the answer . aaaa see does he mean pregnancy see it looks good for some time but its not good . actually . god sake if u still want to love him then tell him about ur feelings
2006-07-04 06:35:32 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great baby, Great
i really love that
keep it up dear.
2006-07-04 06:35:12 · answer #10 · answered by Raj 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋