hey, i'd like your comments on my poem... please?

Question

Glimpses

The wind is blowing now
Running its fingers
Through the sea of grass in the mountainside
I can’t see the wind;
But I wish I could.

Your shoulder feels warm as I lean on
You wrap one arm around me,
Tonight, not for once have I turned,
To see your face.
I know you are here; it’s all that matters
It’s an assurance,
Beyond words or writing.
The wind creates mad ripples
Through the sea of green...

The mountains are quiet, waiting;
The stars:
Bright enough to light the way
Yet dim enough to hide us both.

I keep my eyes fixed
On the landscape; so proud
Of its artist..
For every canvas, we ever painted
Are matchless to the glimpses
Of a world,
Beyond the world itself.

The moment is defining
I no longer wish:
To see the wind,
Or for anything at all...

Answer 1

Very interesting poem. I like you imagery, such as "sea of green".

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Answer 2

who am i to judge your poem but do agreed we are matchless to the only ONE.
keep on writing its will sharpen your creativity and ideas of using right word for the right meaning.

Answer 3

hey its a beautiful poem 4 me but i u like writing poems so u have to make this poem more attractive

Answer 4

Pretty good. Needs some work in places, but good.

Answer 5

Pretty

Answer 6

u could be alittle bit more romantic? overall i think its ok. i just have tendency for romantic stuff.

Answer 7

It's beautiful..... I really like it.....You should enter it into a contest or publish it... Do you have more?

Answer 8

I am not a poem person....
It is okay though...not too bad.

Answer 9

a tad long

Answer 10

OK...a little long for my tastes.