Its a poem and i need ur opinion!
Monster
Time flies by
but all you ask
is, "why?"
Why is life this way
Where everyone is left to decay.
My music pulls me through
All the hard times i've had
Only with you
Trying to pull me away
from the only thing
that kept me to stay.
This world doesn't understand
it all lies within human hands.
my life depends on me
not on anything else.
It's all a mater of time
before you flee
Don't worry, It'll come
when you see
the monster come out of me.
2006-06-28 15:11:23 · 7 answers · asked by I LOVE DYLAN 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
i really like it...i think it might just be the best poems i've read on here...so far. 10 out of 10! good work!
2006-06-28 15:42:01 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Great rhyming and word use but my advice try to fan out and encompass different aspects of self the next time, maybe happy or even jealousy, I doubt theres much future in angry poetry
2006-06-29 00:02:32 · answer #2 · answered by Greshymn 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good, but you started out with a precise rhyme and rythmn pattern. Either keep that up or drop it to make it better.
2006-06-28 23:06:56 · answer #3 · answered by heartbroken 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats GRATE u must have a talent 4 poetry cuz i can tell it
2006-06-28 22:15:47 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! I really liked it, it was great.
2006-06-28 22:25:27 · answer #5 · answered by softballmoosey79 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you go girl! and live by what you say and feel. don't let anybody change you!
2006-06-28 22:36:59 · answer #6 · answered by Tazbunny 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it
2006-06-28 22:14:21 · answer #7 · answered by sara m 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋