Knock! Knock! Knock! Ernesto knocked on the door of Alaina's house. "Come in!" Alaina yelled. "Hi, you ready?" Ernesto asked, coming in. "Yes," Alaina said, letting her robe fall off. Ernesto eyed her head to toe. "Wow,"He said, getting undressed quickly. Alaina fell on the bed and Ernesto got on top of her. She pulled the cover over them and the sex of the future began.
A lot of stuff happened under that cover. Alaina moaned loudly as Ernesto started working his way into her. Once he was good and comfortable, he moved his hips really fast and pushed really hard. Alaina cried out in pain. He smiled. He pushed harder and harder untill Alaina could barely stand it. She cried so loud as her gave a very hard push. "You okay?" Ernesto asked. "Yes,"Alaina said, panting. Ernesto was about to plant his seed in her. She could feel it.
Alaina decided to flip him over and show him some action. She moved up and down, moving her hips slightly. He leaned his head back and moaned. Alaina kissed, licked, ang bit his bare skin. "Wow, you're good," Hee moaned. Alaina smiled. Ernesto flipped her over and planted his seed, making her um private thing bleed a little. And then he rolled off of her and they both fell asleep....
2006-06-27 20:46:44 · 24 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
haha, funny.
2006-06-27 21:01:01 · answer #1 · answered by barefeet561 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ok, maybe I disagree with the subject matter, but she's got some talent. Really. My little one has been a published writer for a couple years, she's 14. Every time she has to write an essay for school, she surprises both me and her teacher with her talent.
I'd say if she could write a decent lead-in for this story, and maybe work a little harder on details... In about five minutes, I could edit it into publishable material. Instant short story, ready for Hustler Magazine.
The thing about writing is, If you're young, all the publisher need to do is tell the reader what your age is. All of a sudden, everyone forgives you for any faults. Which is the basic reason why I disagree with the subject matter. One of those perverts might actually find her...
2006-06-27 21:06:17 · answer #2 · answered by 42ITUS™ 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
For a 12 three hundred and sixty 5 days previous that writing is particularly sturdy!! lol even as i became 12 I nevertheless spelled who-"hoo"! i imagine she purely desires to operate in somewhat more advantageous component and clarify the plot somewhat more advantageous. that is form of confusing to save on with. provide some more advantageous backround assistance, and describe the caracters some more advantageous. i might want to pick to study more advantageous! lol
2016-10-13 21:58:37 · answer #3 · answered by charis 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
LOL LOL LOL LOL!!!
I'm a 16-year-old writer too!! If I start writing like this, I won't get any contracts in the future!
This.......Christ Lord!!! What's happening to kids these days? As far as the future of that 12-yr-old is concerned she might be opening a Porn Literary Society. God save her!!!
Send your cousin to some value education classes, she's in desperate need!
This is just the biggest crap, ****, nonsense I've come across in days!!!!
2006-06-27 22:43:43 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
A 12 year old wrote this?! Right...
I remember having urges around that age, but never enough to write something that would possibly end up in Penthouse Forums.
2006-06-27 20:58:27 · answer #5 · answered by ryansharich.com 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I must say it's shocking and totally disgustin that a 12 yr wrote this and then i gotta ask where the **** r the parents in this childs life? other than that, good luck raisin that kid.
2006-06-27 21:05:26 · answer #6 · answered by curiousme 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
jeez. your cousin is in need for help. When i was 12, i didn't even know exactly what sex is and that kid is writing as if he is a graduate in sex. Tell his parents to help him out. Give him some good books.
2006-06-29 06:46:29 · answer #7 · answered by Jas 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think her writing skills are poor, and her mom should take away the Harliquin romance novels. If she read better Literature she would learn how to write better.
She should also stick to subjects she knows something about.
2006-06-27 20:54:36 · answer #8 · answered by Dee 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
it was okay, I think you need to talk about sex with your cousin, tell her how is should be, and that it doesn't have to be so quick and straight to intercourse, explain to her there is much more to a relationship then just screwing real quick and bleeding a little from her "Um private thing"
2006-06-27 20:51:58 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Wow what can i say i'm shocked children of this age know exactly what goes on!!!
2006-06-27 21:07:39 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
she is 12 omg
2006-06-27 20:52:07 · answer #11 · answered by jessica|jealousy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋