wot i call love let me know what you think? (poem)?

Question

i hear your voice as the wind goes by.
i see your face in the moon lit sky,
i wish upon the first star i see,
sitting there so gracefully.

wishing every day was spent with you.
doing the things we used to do,
your my little aniolku,
you will always be.
the key to my heart,
for eternity. X

Answer 1

I think it is lovely!
Its obvious that this "aiolku" is a very special person to you.
If my ex sent me this poem, i may reconsider the relationship.
Good luck!

Answer 2

Not trying to be mean, but I'm not feeling the rhyme scheme. (Ha, and that rhymes!) Rhyming every line really makes a poem seem babyish to me. If it's to put in a love letter to your girlfriend, it will probably work. But otherwise it seems corny to me.

Answer 3

i write poems too. i have a few on the web as it is. I think it was well written. rhyeming isnt everything that make a poem, even though sometimes it helps. but u can understand the concept of ur poem as written. keep writing.

Answer 4

It is really nice. The use of imagery in the first is nice. I applaud you for placing out on the web. Well I'm not into he rhyming but nice touches. A+

Answer 5

That is lovely :) My partner writes me poetry, and as cheesy as it sounds and how i cringe when i have read it *grin* its touching, and creative-it shows great emotion and appreciation for your partner or whoever, and you are talented :)

good luck xx

Answer 6

Oh baby, I love you too. hold me close and never let go.
seriously dude, marry me!

Answer 7

im a songwriter and thats beautiful, very poetic, keep up the good work!

Answer 8

its nice. keep on writing. good luck to you.

Answer 9

BEAUTIFUL, OUTSTANDING, HEARTFELT. I loved it