"As to the kids, their father had given instructions to the bank to submit their monthly allowance and the bank was punctual as clockwork".
2006-06-26 06:57:53 · 5 answers · asked by Carolo 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
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2006-06-26 07:01:36 · answer #1 · answered by everyone's friend 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is a horrid sentence to read. it doesn't flow, and its hard to understand what you're saying. just because something may be grammatically correct (and i'm not saying the above sentence is) doesn't make it a good sentence.
you would use the beginning, "as to the kids" only if this sentence follows another one concerning disposing of money. like, " he told his wife to spend her money on groceries. As to the kids, he told them to put their money in the bank." And its probably "as for the kids" not to.
the father would tell the kids to give their money to the bank
not tell the bank to deposit the kids allowance. Well, he could, but then you wouldn't start the sentence with, as for the kids, because it sets the sentence with the object of the sentence being the kids, yet you've made the object the bank.
"bank to submit their monthly" here you have the word "their" as being possessive of the bank, when i'm fairly sure you mean their to be possessive of the kids. as in the the kids have their allowance.
i don't really get the punctual thing at all. doesn't make sense. what is a bank going to do, hold money for days and not do anything with it?
but if you were going to say it. there would be an extra "as" in there....the banks was AS punctual as clockwork.
i would suggest the following, provided the previous sentence sets this one up:
As for the kids, their father told them to deposit their allowance in the bank.
Don't try to sound pretentious, it doesn't work for most people.
2006-06-26 14:19:01 · answer #2 · answered by ladylawyer26 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Probably "As for the kids" instead of "As to". Their probably should also be a comma after "allowance", otherwise it sounds like the bank is submitting the allowance and submitting the bank.
2006-06-26 14:04:33 · answer #3 · answered by slaga 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the father instructed the bank to deposit the kids allowances and the bank concurred boy we sure do use a lot of distinguished ways of saying....put my kids money in the bank so they wont blow it
2006-06-26 14:04:39 · answer #4 · answered by . 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No. Add a comma after the word, "allowance."
2006-06-26 14:07:21 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋