1.Here and there,a few ray from street-lamps filtered through the trees,listless as the eye of one who is dozing.
2.Between the trees appeared one or two street lamps,listless as the eyes of someone drowsy.
2006-06-26 00:21:54 · 17 answers · asked by wz_tiffany 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
2 the other doesnt read well to me
2006-06-26 00:24:09 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Here and there, rays from street lamps filtered through the trees, listless like the eye of a person in slumber.
2006-06-26 07:26:18 · answer #2 · answered by v_stroke_28 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poetically, 1 is better than 2, except it is "broken" English. (Who or what is listless, the trees, the rays, the lamps?.) It's "rays", not "ray"; dozing is definitely better than drowsy.
2006-06-26 07:38:41 · answer #3 · answered by know it Al 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
#1, Because you're actually describing with more detail that a few rays from the lamps are escaping through the trees, rather than one or two lamps being seen, which isn't as clear.
2006-06-26 11:15:25 · answer #4 · answered by Abstract 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Number 2 The other speaks of someone dozing. Drowsy fits, dozing dosent.
2006-06-26 07:29:08 · answer #5 · answered by needsum 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like 1
2006-06-26 18:39:51 · answer #6 · answered by Dave W 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The second one, coz its a bit more poetic and worthy of a novel. But do try t get another line if even this feels not good enough. You might come up with a totally new line or find a way to make the present ones better. Works that way for me.
2006-06-26 10:50:32 · answer #7 · answered by Brandi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No 1 is better. It give an artistic feeling to the sentence and the person reading or writing it.
2006-06-26 07:29:43 · answer #8 · answered by happyhour 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
#1: Bad
#2: Better
2006-06-26 07:25:57 · answer #9 · answered by ed 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
First option is a little more artistic...paints a better picture.
2006-06-26 07:26:23 · answer #10 · answered by Arlene06 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋