This is a sad poem, im telling ya dont read it if u dont like depressed poems ok? when u criticsize plz dont criticize too hard, i called this 1 my delusion part 2, if u r interested to read part 1...u'll need to search for it in my profile, if u r too lazy to do so, the first part was abt how much i beat the pain i was feeling cuz i was going thru really hectic things in my life, now i wrote the second part cuz other hectic feelings are happening, check it out:
My Delusion (Part II)
The moment I thought it was over
The bad feelings are gone forever
The sun shined and the moon smiled
And everything became absolutely alright
I found myself being pushed ahead
To another long path of darkness
Walking on wires again
My eyes are bleeding in pain
My body feels the strain
And I forgot where is my real aim
When am I gonna fly away from this path?
Find the light and get my faith back
Shut up all the bad feelings inside of me
Kill all the doubts and set myself free
But I won't let it beat me this time
Will fight with all my faith and pride
With the help of my heart, will and mind
and I am sure about the happiness I will find
2006-06-25 11:09:11 · 6 answers · asked by Drowned in English! 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
It's very good, for a sad poem. I've written some sad ones, myself, which weren't anything like it. But it seems as if something is missing.
2006-06-25 11:31:04 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think everyone needs to express themselves creatively, but I like poems with more subtly.
2006-06-25 18:36:18 · answer #2 · answered by Starlight 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem rocks!!! Ever think about painting??
2006-07-02 08:27:06 · answer #3 · answered by amarylis 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad
2006-06-25 19:54:09 · answer #4 · answered by Judas Rabbi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
22222
2006-07-04 12:56:02 · answer #5 · answered by kalpesh t 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
do u mind if i copy this? its really good.
2006-06-25 18:16:10 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋