my poem!!!!?

Question

You make me want to be dauntless
never recognized that feeling before,
when I look into your eyes
my heart gets ready to roar,
Don't want to call it love, because that would get me attached
just want to call it obsession, and convince myself it wont last,
you dont realise the control you have over me,
dont want you to either, becouse you'd take advantage of it
not much else to say
just pray for me dear god
becouse with out some luck i wont last long.

Answer 1

I like it, its very diverse and it asks questions of yourself and the reader. Its like a cry for help in a way, maybe you where very unsure or insecure when you wrote this. And you have the time to write and i like creativite ppl. Thanks

Answer 2

Your poem does not follow a good format, it can be improved. The idea behind is very much clear. If this poem is on your life then you either give way to your heart or keep your mind in supreme and stubborn control and never regret.

Answer 3

Waht about your poem if you want me to score it i give it 200% excellent witch it just stops at 100% A+!

Answer 4

I think that you write very well and will write more poems in the future. good luck to you. I love to write poems. they say our true feelings and its better to write it as a poem than say it sometimes.

Answer 5

ahhh it takes me back to my first love. thats a nice poem simplicity at the same time captivating. good job

Answer 6

Your poem lacks meter and rhythm.
http://www.writing.upenn.edu/~afilreis/88/meter.html

Answer 7

Having difficulty of being accepted?You will be, as soon as you'll be able to live your poetry.

Answer 8

What is the question.

Nice poem

Answer 9

it could be better.