She chimes in
But is music to no ones ears
This twisted lullaby cannot pass so simply
These tangled words
These mangled meanings
They could be more true
Things are what they are
We breathe just to breathe
We live just to exist
We are just to be
2006-06-23 14:54:30 · 10 answers · asked by elemenopee. 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Being that I have been writing for years and know quality, your poem is excellent.
2006-06-23 15:01:09 · answer #1 · answered by Richard Stapleton 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Wow! That poem is so good! I love how you made it seem like the girl sings a song, but she can never relate to what she sings about, I think. Well, other than that, lovely.
2006-06-23 14:59:41 · answer #2 · answered by littlemissjewel101 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, I find it confusing. Are the words she is saying meaningless or is that the interpretation of the hearer?
It's also depressing that someone feels life is meaningless.
2006-06-23 16:51:45 · answer #3 · answered by David B 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it
you are so creative and thouyght wisely
i am so happy that you are not shy to put it on the web like this in front of the internet yahoo world!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
2006-06-23 14:59:22 · answer #4 · answered by Brittany 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
in my opinion poems like this paint a picture this one makes you want to see more look deeper into her existence. keep going. Its good.
2006-06-23 15:03:05 · answer #5 · answered by Baby 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was a pretty good poem, better than i could do good job
2006-06-23 14:58:42 · answer #6 · answered by Quasar1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good, but felt i was waiting for an ending.good job though
2006-06-23 15:26:04 · answer #7 · answered by charliet1 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. Good job.
2006-06-23 14:58:55 · answer #8 · answered by arabian_hottie_16 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
g00d
2006-06-23 14:58:11 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its alright.
2006-06-23 15:08:00 · answer #10 · answered by Hermy* 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋