My first love
She was indeed a wild child
Always changing the color of her hair and switching up her style
Whenever I was with her I couldn't help but smile
When we would go out people would look at me funny
But I didn't mind, she was my honey
For the longest time she has been by my side
She knew everything about me
There was nothing I could hide
At first we were just messing around but eventually we became serious
We were together almost everyday
I had her in every way
She was never hesitant to try a new technique or toy
She was my lady
She did anything to bring me joy
All I had to do was call and she'd be ready
I loved her so much
I took her around the world
I have spent the bulk of my earnings just to be with that girl
I could never get enough of her or her intoxicating aroma
When I was with her all of my problems disappeared
And her absence was the only thing I feared
She lifted my spirits and made me feel like a king
With her I felt I could accomplish anything
Then there were the rough times
I shoulda got out then, but love made me blind
When I was broke she wanted nothing to do with me
I had to spit extra game just to skip the fee
Other times when i needed her she was nowhere to be found
I would call all around......
but nothing.
She was unfaithful, Sometimes I'd find her with strange dudes or even friends of mine
But i never tripped, as long as i got my time
I realize now, how unhealthy our relationship was
She clouded my head and made me act a foo
We would be laid up for hours, ignoring what I had to do
Always dressed to impress in her brown or white gown
She took me up and brought me down
I always thought i could leave her
But I guess I'm addicted
She f**ks with my head, she's twisted
I think its time to end this thang
My love affair with that girl, Mary Jane
2006-06-23 04:47:12 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Its very ingenious. In the beginning it sounds like a mediocre love poem about yet another girl, but the end makes you read it all over again, and that is where it is good. I like double entendres.
2006-06-23 04:54:42 · answer #1 · answered by da chet 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I think it's an impressive display of clever and interesting rhyming, half rhyming, natural meter and mostly good logic. But I think there are two bothersome things about the sense of it. The "surprise ending" is not very subtle and the change from a completely yielding and devoted inamorata at the beginning to a deceitful, unfaithful, money-oriented creature toward the end seems too sudden, even if it makes an accurate metaphor for the way m-j acted on you. Although I have no experience with it, I think the change in attitude must be either more gradual or a mixed attitude almost from the beginning. .
2006-06-23 10:26:22 · answer #2 · answered by haroldpohl2000 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The poem is good - very good in fact.
Hopefully you've ended your time with Mary Jane. By the way, do you know that Mary Jane also stands for Marijuana? Perhaps that's what Mary Jane is.
Have a lovely rest of the day.
2006-06-23 04:53:13 · answer #3 · answered by Goblin g 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I agree you will have to end the love affair with Mary Jane.. There is a beautiful world out there don't let her bring you down, you are stronger than you think..
I like your poem you have a way with words.. keep writing..
2006-06-23 05:03:17 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like the person who wrote this was head over heels for "Mary Jane". It's time to move on and forget about her. Yes, some women can be like that. Sorry bud.
2006-06-23 04:54:53 · answer #5 · answered by k m 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is a nice poem. But Mary Jane is more like an illusion, right?
2006-06-23 04:58:05 · answer #6 · answered by Jenny 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds about right! Its a Typical Pot Head Story!
2006-06-23 04:52:48 · answer #7 · answered by thegumboguy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow... that's one long poem. It became a story after the 5th page :)
Once I finally got through it I liked it.
2006-06-23 05:22:32 · answer #8 · answered by Ipshwitz 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
lol hey i thought it was a real girl , interesting poem but keep of the drugs dude!
2006-06-23 07:25:51 · answer #9 · answered by *.T!m@.* 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it
2006-06-23 08:13:31 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋