I'm writing a scene. maybe you can tell me what it would look like?

Question

family comes in a restaurant. dad's wearing a suit and tie. everyone sits down orders their food. minutes later they eat it as if they stole it. (how would this scene look like?. what's their facial expressions? are they just gulping it all down? what....?) describe how this may look to you if you were in the restaurant with them.

here's the same situation, but they eat their food as if they thought the F.B.I. were watching them?

(during dinner) Mom passes a silent gas (farts). one person in the background smells it and vomits. then turns back to their eating. (seconds later a waiter walks by the mess, cleans it up and puts it in the person's (the vomiting customer's) cup (note: the vomiting customer doesn't know it and takes a drink). what do you suppose the person (the vomiting customer) does after?

try and desribe as best as you can. if you want desrcibe all three.


Note: i do a lot of comdey writing

Answer 1

~Let me think about this.
You're a budding writer
You have a half-baked idea for a trite and meaningless scene
You have no context and fail to introduce your characters
You ask for help for complete strangers on YaHoo Answers

My best advice - switch to math. You won't make it in literature.

Answer 2

In the first scene, the family would have there arms around the food as if to hide it. They would also be looking around a lot with anxiety on their faces while sneaking little peices of food to eat.

If a person looks at the family the would stop chewing in mid chew.

Second scene, the person who took a sip of their own vomit would spit it out, vomit again and then throw the cup away from them causeing it to spray all over a passing waitress or customer.

Answer 3

first scene - that's my family at the fish restaurant where they give you all you can eat hush puppies and dad has a small paper bag positioned on his lap out of site - I keep ordering more while dad raises an eyebrow as if to say i eat too much meanwhile josh is stuffing more hush puppies down his pants into the cloth napkin he just stole and mom looks both ways which makes her look really suspicious while she just shovels some directly into her purse resting on the floor. Suddenly a flash goes off and we stopp everything immediately cause we are all sure that we are being photographed for some restaurant promo on how good their hush puppies are - meanwhile i try and look nonchalant and stare at our waiter while dad fills the bag for latter.
Oh how I loved our meals together at that place - just getting the hush puppies was better than eating it later what a great family tradition we all kept.

Answer 4

Would love to help but I'm more of a drama thriller writer, I suppose the scene will involve them looking at each other trying not to smile or look suspicious, the scene would have lots of close-ups on the faces of the family as well as the other guest at the resturants.

Becuase no one is sure who is a guest at the resturant or an FBI agent.

Answer 5

Wow you really have a lot of talen. One scene with vomiting a farting so funny. The great thing is you never even pulled out your ace in the hole, a midget on a unicycle.

Answer 6

comedy ? you're kidding right ?

Answer 7

You need to get a serious life. Please evolve a little.

Answer 8

don't no

Answer 9

it would look like wat you just said.or how you describe it.