Edit this paragraph. I need 8, not 7 sentences.?

Question

I'm try to make an 8 sentence paragraph. I have 7 I believe. Can this be altered to make 8? Or does it need more content. It's for my grade 8 language arts class.
Not asking for my homework to be done. Just helped.
It's topic is why people are leaving the city for the suburbs.

There are many reasons City of Toronto residents are moving into the suburbs. Some of the most notable one’s may be the fact Toronto’s population has almost doubled in the last 10 years and the city itself is becoming extremely populated in the downtown core with more and more office buildings being built each year. Residents are now sprawling out to the huge developmental areas of Scarborough, Markham and other surrounding areas. The suburbs themselves offer safer, cleaner neighborhoods. The suburbs are where families can be raised, where kids can enjoy the outdoors in places like parks, community centers and not have to worry about the noisy dirty core of the city itself. The suburbs offer quiet family oriented neighborhoods with plenty of parks and trails that are safe for the whole family. As a result, more and more city residents are moving to the suburbs.

Answer 1

Many of your sentences started with "the suburbs" so i made some changes to that as well to help the sentences flow better in addition to your 8 sentences i just changed the first one----hope this helps


There are many reasons City of Toronto residents are moving into the suburbs. Some of the most notable one’s may be the fact Toronto’s population has almost doubled in the last 10 years. The city itself is becoming extremely populated in the downtown core with more and more office buildings being built each year. Residents are now sprawling out to the huge developmental areas of Scarborough, Markham and other surrounding areas. As oposed to the city, the suburbs themselves offer safer, cleaner neighborhoods. The suburbs are where families can be raised, where kids can enjoy the outdoors in places like parks, community centers and not have to worry about the noisy dirty core of the city itself. They offer quiet family oriented neighborhoods with plenty of parks and trails that are safe for the whole family. As a result, more and more city residents are moving to the suburbs.

Answer 2

There are many reasons residents of Toronto are moving into the suburbs. Among the most cited reasons may be that Toronto's population has almost doubled in the last 10 years and the city itself is becoming extremely populated in the downtown core with more and more office buildings being built each year. Along with this population explosion, crime and overcrowding are becoming a problem. As a result,residents are now sprawling out into surrounding areas such as Scarborough and Markham. The suburbs offer many attractive features. For example quiet ,family oriented neigborhoods with plenty of parks, trails and community centers where kids can enjoy the outdoors without worrying about the noise and crime of the city. As a result of the safer environment and natural beauty, more and more people are moving to the suburbs.

Answer 3

There are many reasons residents of the city of Toronto are moving into the suburbs. One of the notable reasons for this may be the fact Toronto’s population has almost doubled in the last 10 years. In addition, the city itself is becoming extremely populated in the downtown core with more and more office buildings being built each year. Residents are now sprawling out to the huge developmental areas of Scarborough, Markham, and other surrounding areas. The suburbs themselves offer safer and cleaner neighborhoods. The suburbs are where people can raise their children and can enjoy the outdoors in places like parks and community centers and not have to worry about the noisy dirty core of the city itself. The suburbs offer quiet, family oriented neighborhoods with plenty of parks and trails that are safe for the whole family. As a result, more and more city residents are moving to the suburbs.

Answer 4

Change the 2nd sentence to: Some of the most notable may be the fact that Toronto's population has almost doubled in the last 10 years. In the downtown area, the city is becoming extremely populated with the many office buildings that are being developed yearly.

Also, you should probably not start so many sentences with "The Suburbs." Move some things around...such as: Life in these neighborhoods are quiet, with plenty of parks and trails that make these areas popular with families.

Answer 5

Try this:

There are many reasons why City of Toronto residents are moving into the suburbs. The most notable ones may be the fact that Toronto's population has almost doubled over the last ten years, and the city itself is becoming extremely populated in the downtown core. More and more office buildings are being built each year.

That adds an extra sentence.

Answer 6

"Some of the most notable one’s may be the fact Toronto’s population has almost doubled in the last 10 years and the city itself is becoming extremely populated in the downtown core with more and more office buildings being built each year."


it has a lot of run on sentences but if u cut it in half and just revise that part u will have 8 sentences

Answer 7

You have at least two run-on sentences, the second one and the fifth. Break each of them into two. I would however add more content, specifically about Toronto's population and any proof you may have that the suburbs are cleaner and safer. Also, isn't Scarborough IN Toronto? Or is the "City of Toronto" distinct from "Metro Toronto"? How do more OFFICE buildings make for a more populated city?

Sorry I have friends with families in Toronto, and my parents lived in a giant ugly apartment building in Oakville for a while, so feel free to colour me biased. BTW, I think "neighboUrhood" is still standard Canadian spelling, isn't it?

Answer 8

Change this paragraph:

The suburbs are where families can be raised, where kids can enjoy the outdoors in places like parks, community centers and not have to worry about the noisy dirty core of the city itself.

To:
The suburbs are where families can be raised and where kids can enjoy the outdoors in places like parks and community centers. Also, residents do not have to worry about the noisy dirty core of the city itself.

Answer 9

The suburbs themselves offer safer, cleaner neighborhoods, where families can be raised and not have to worry about the noisy dirty core of the city itself.

You have a lot of run-on sentences here.

Answer 10

I'd say that the one I'm worst about is number 2. You see, that tends to be the way I talk (yes, it does sound very pretentious. Oh well). I've always found it easiest to write the way I talk. Then I'll look back at what I've written and realize that the paragraph I just wrote is actually one long sentence. It's not exactly a run-on because it's well structured grammatically, but there's a lot of unnecessary crap tagged onto the front and back of the real sentence.