I wrote your name on the palm of my hand,
I clenched it into a fist.
I ran towards the sea . . .
Your name was beating so hard, in my palm,
As if a crazy heart . . .
I couldn't have you anymore,
Opened my bleeding fist,
Threw you towards those drunk waves.
I sat there, watching you dancing hot with the waves.
2006-06-20 18:18:58 · 13 answers · asked by Self-built walls all around 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Very nice! Good images there!
Have you ever been to www.allpoetry.com? You might like it! People write poems for others to read and critique.
2006-06-20 19:02:28 · answer #1 · answered by Plain and Simple 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Groovy wordzzzz dude
2006-06-27 15:17:48 · answer #2 · answered by Ouros 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'll be honest with you. I understood the the poem but it was boring. Stop being so dramatic and add flavor to your writing.
2006-06-20 21:49:23 · answer #3 · answered by Re15 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You certainly are not related to Stephen King!
2006-06-20 18:21:35 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Doesnt rhym but good anyhow i would give it a 7.5 out of ten
2006-06-20 18:21:53 · answer #5 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Get psychoanalysis help right away.
2006-06-20 18:33:42 · answer #6 · answered by JUNK MAN 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
U're cruel.....btw, was that a question? Cuz it says so beside it.
2006-06-20 18:21:19 · answer #7 · answered by Fuliche 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it!! really good
2006-06-20 18:25:57 · answer #8 · answered by softballmoosey79 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i liked it you did good
2006-06-20 18:21:05 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's more like it!!! More detail.
2006-06-20 18:23:12 · answer #10 · answered by mother_t_of_wpg 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋