Without you,
I cannot live.
Without you,
I cannot survive.
I want,
To love you.
Without you,
I am blue.
It is you,
I love.
I love you,
My dove.
2006-06-20 17:15:55 · 34 answers · asked by Sammy Hagar 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
you know, as i read it over, i don't like it either
2006-06-20 17:19:22 · update #1
Aw i like it. its nice...you should submit it on poetry.com
2006-06-20 17:17:40 · answer #1 · answered by Your_Star 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well, As usual I like it. I don't care if all the rest think it's mushy, quaint or whatever. It sounds good to me. It relates to most all of the others that you have written and is consistent with the content. So don't worry about it.... Not everyone can appreciate the finer things in life. I happen to be a romanticist and one of the ones who sympathizes completely. You know that by now.......
(itsimpossible)
To you my friend
Its not the end
Think of the time
When you shall meet
The one you love
Walking down the street
Watch for her
Driving by so fast
She misses all
And comes in last.
But some bright day
You'll find a way
To speak to her
Without delay.
She is waiting to hear
I'm sure
So hurry and tell her
With the lure
That brings her back
Time and again
The voice, the swagger
And those incredible hands.....
Hey, woohoo.......~p~
2006-06-20 17:36:07 · answer #2 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
try this
tiptoeing across this pool of insanity
like blood it thickens and pulls me into its depths
i struggle but soon become too weak
i decide to let the crimson tide choke me
but deep down inside myself i think of you
and the thought of your smile helps me break free
2006-06-20 17:20:02 · answer #3 · answered by Melissa D 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That sounds like a really good poem, but I've seen better.
Thank me later.
2006-06-20 17:17:54 · answer #4 · answered by royalriku 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is one I started but could'nt finish
with all the stars in the universe
I pledge my deepest love and
long for the day that noone could say
that you were not mine
2006-06-20 17:20:59 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
because of you....i got the bluessssssssssssss
needs a harmonica tune behind it and maybe it could be sung on the sidewalks for wine money
2006-06-20 17:20:54 · answer #6 · answered by Cap'n Donna 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its cute... in a corny kinda way. A little bit too simple though.
2006-06-20 17:18:51 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too ambivalent. I liked the first stanza.
2006-06-20 17:19:15 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a good start, I can sense the emotion. Just keep at it!
2006-06-20 17:18:43 · answer #9 · answered by Snapple Monkey 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, but it's kinda kid-ish. It's too, um, corny or something. Not too great.
2006-06-20 17:19:27 · answer #10 · answered by *AstrosChick* 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hahahaha... That's horrible!
2006-06-20 17:17:35 · answer #11 · answered by Rasha S 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋