WAKING LIFE
Life. Moves on.
We stay in, putting our heads in knowledge,
Very much separated from the world.
Things go on outside,
How much do we see them?
Does anyone observe, that the trees outside
Takes in what we give out ,
And gives out what we need ,
A thing necessary for life.
Life
Moves on
Who comes out, and observe
The sky and how it changes.
The sky
The only thing that had witnessed all of history.
Who among us actually seek this truth?
Life.
Goes on.
But do we come out ,
And bathe our faces in the morning wind
Or smell the flowers outside,
Or observe the clouds that move.
The clouds.
As they move, it makes us aware ,
That life moves on.
2006-06-20 17:05:46 · 14 answers · asked by samyshine 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Life
By Cindy Clay
Life is Stressful,
Life is a pain;
Life is gonna drive me,
Completely insane.
Life is worthless,
Life really sucks;
Life is useless,
Without a million bucks.
Life we must live,
Life must go on;
Life will be over,
When I'm finally gone.
2006-06-20 17:11:22 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds refreshing. An invitation for nature to imbibe us with the deeper meanings of life.
An indicator of a good philosophy of life. You are blessed !
2006-06-20 17:11:38 · answer #2 · answered by Edgar V 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good try, keep on trying and you will get the rhyme, identity of sound between words or their endings, esp. in verse. Best of Luck!!
2006-06-21 20:24:44 · answer #3 · answered by Hafiz 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love it i find that most people don't care to much about the world but for those who does sees that's its a wonderful place to be living in after all the world is what help us stay alive but as for most of people we help kill each other
2006-06-20 17:13:32 · answer #4 · answered by chris 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's is very, uh, philisophical and in that repect it is good. But there is a problem, there is no rhyme or other scheme. But I'd give it a B.
2006-06-20 17:10:20 · answer #5 · answered by Dead 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really enjoyed this poem...it's unique and has a style of it's own. And I also like how you encorporate life in different areas of nature....pretty cool...
2006-06-21 10:40:41 · answer #6 · answered by blondieblue98 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
uh ! the idea is good but it seems more like a prose than a poem.Try making it a litte poetic.
2006-06-20 17:09:32 · answer #7 · answered by sana 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That is a beautiful poem and you should talk to a publishing company i bet it could get published!!!
2006-06-20 17:11:32 · answer #8 · answered by :) 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It has a some cliches, but besides that its cool.
2006-06-20 17:09:42 · answer #9 · answered by kitt 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Love it, you definitely should write more.
2006-06-20 17:10:11 · answer #10 · answered by jdc591 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋