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2006-06-20 03:56:13 · 9 answers · asked by Da Beatmaster 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Not bad Beatmaster...I was pleasantly surprised with your poems and I truly believe they are an honest representation of you and your passions. The only problem I would have is an inconsistent rhyming scheme throughout the poem...Other than that, keep up the good work! :)
2006-06-20 04:08:40 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
When the water comes down, so do I.
It takes me with it
Almost makes me cry
I dread the day when when you hear a small "Plop"
Such a powerful event starts with a drop.
ur lame .....
2006-06-20 11:01:31 · answer #2 · answered by KATEgRA 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like that they come from the heart
but i think a little bit of convensional use would do wonders for them.
2006-06-20 11:01:37 · answer #3 · answered by B.Dahlia 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow those r really good.,keep it up it will surprise u.
2006-06-20 12:31:30 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good writing. Thought provoking and insightful....Good luck...(~_~)
2006-06-20 11:05:03 · answer #5 · answered by silhouette 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i read sorry it does NT rhyme but it sounds good
2006-06-20 11:03:19 · answer #6 · answered by cahaba valley energy saving s 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-06-20 11:02:48 · answer #7 · answered by mphoe 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
those are nice,keep it going
2006-06-20 12:39:47 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really cute :-)
2006-06-20 11:03:18 · answer #9 · answered by That Guy! 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋