At home in my heart
Blue sky high bright
Riding on my bike
May we fly a kite?
Oh, come and hold me tight...
2006-06-19 00:34:21 · 15 answers · asked by Hibernating Ladybird 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
this is the first one I ever wrote
it's the summerspirit :)
2006-06-19 00:35:02 · update #1
Aristotle, very good answer! :)
Shows maturity.
2006-06-19 17:09:42 · update #2
it may be my last one, actually
2006-06-19 17:10:07 · update #3
It was great,
How you can create,
Lines so sweet.
A perfect 10 is my rate.
2006-06-19 14:50:46 · answer #1 · answered by Sammy Hagar 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it is very sweet. It demonstrates the innocence and free spirit of a young person. I like it alot. It is a very short poem, yet I keep reading it. It makes me happy. Thank you, friend.
2006-06-29 01:34:57 · answer #2 · answered by I am Sunshine 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poems don't have to rhyme.But they do have to be in good form . Your forms alittle off/But its a nice peom anyways.I give it a 6.With 5 being average.
2006-06-28 17:49:12 · answer #3 · answered by mividacristiana 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No offence but it sounds like something a child would write. The words don't make any sense. But if it makes sense to you and means something then it does sound nice.
2006-06-29 05:20:09 · answer #4 · answered by kate h 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
interesting poem....poems don't have to rhyme but opposite lines should or every third line...enough to complete a thought.
every poem should have a line, where a thought is conveyed about a time, when we are young and brave and true, I know I have and so can you.
see?
2006-06-29 04:16:48 · answer #5 · answered by coolbeansnyc 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Get a Patent Quick. publish rights. hurry before its to late good job!!
2006-06-28 21:25:06 · answer #6 · answered by p_valdivez 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i for my section do no longer comprehend yet i think of i will help with the ending...How approximately if Richie trys to get his revenge yet fails and then after an prolonged and sophisticated verbal substitute with Victoria of why he kills people she forgives him and TA DA! happy ending!
2016-10-31 03:04:10 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
potholes in my lawn
where have all the gophers gone?
they dig in the night
and brought such blight
to my pastures of green
now they hide, not seen
go go gopher
you've gone away
but I will get your fuzzy lil' azz...
one day
2006-06-29 04:36:47 · answer #8 · answered by soulfree 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
or may we sit by a lake?
come walk wit me hun...
let me show you what I have found...
maybe we could sit on the dock?....
cool our feet in the water.
Maybe we could laugh; or talk;
A word is dead when said some say.....
"I" say?
It just began to live; "THAT DAY."
2006-06-28 19:49:05 · answer #9 · answered by taybugg97 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's light and quick, just like summer. I like the use of assonance.
2006-06-19 00:44:54 · answer #10 · answered by ^..^ALUKAH^..^ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋