Knowing what you feel for me,
Inside but rarely letting it free,
Seeing what's inside of you,
Makes every dream in me come true.
Without you it seems I can't survive,
But with you I feel crowded inside.
Confusion fills my heart and mind,
But you've only been kind.
Im scared of what lies ahead,
What treasures and secrets may haunt me soon.
Ive been living in my comfort zone too long,
And Ive decided it's with you I feel strong.
So now I give you my heart
And hope you will see,
That breaking it,
Will destroy me...
2006-06-18 16:33:21 · 20 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
Go ahead Super Milk Chan.. :)
2006-06-18 16:40:51 · update #1
If you wrote this yourself... you deserve a STANDING ovation...
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2006-06-18 16:39:13 · answer #1 · answered by annmohdali 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your words are lovely. My questions are:
Why do you feel 'crowded inside' with him?
How can 'treasures' haunt you?
You say you've been in your comfort zone too long yet end with you seemingly remaining inside that comfort zone.
In the area where you live seek to find a poetry group where you can be around like minded people who enjoy the craft of poetry as you do! Don't let anyone keep you from writing more and more!
2006-06-18 23:43:15 · answer #2 · answered by LifeCoachJane 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
How your poem is expressed this person can't make up thier mind yes he is all they need and then it's to crowded so then giving your heart is undecided. It's alittle confusing
2006-06-18 23:38:51 · answer #3 · answered by Chelse S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very good, very deep. It's shows your true emotion.
On a scale of 1-10 of a love poems, I'd give it a 9.
Very good work, keep it up.
2006-06-19 00:18:19 · answer #4 · answered by beadnboo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good Luck
2006-06-18 23:39:23 · answer #5 · answered by watergraymutt 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My opinion is i find it very ... nice. I like how it flows. I think a good poem can deliver meaning and bound you with its words. But your poem has more it has flow
2006-06-19 00:08:06 · answer #6 · answered by Saisai 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, it started out REALLY good, but just sorta lost it's magic! The poem itself is contradicting!
2006-06-18 23:38:15 · answer #7 · answered by Jen 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds like lyrics to a somewhat intense sinead o'connor song to me
2006-06-18 23:39:53 · answer #8 · answered by Pale Rider 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very reveling, sad you put so much responsibility on an-others shoulders.
2006-06-18 23:39:38 · answer #9 · answered by Virginia V 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
interesting, you are a co-dependent from the words... it's kind of scary but that is probably what makes it good. Please don't hurt anyone if things don't go your way, especially not yourself!
2006-06-18 23:36:39 · answer #10 · answered by Big C 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow... That's really good! Do you mind if i use it for my away message on AIM?
2006-06-18 23:38:30 · answer #11 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋