Poem-Do you like it?

Question

I wrote this poem.
Tell me what you think about it please.
Its a Haiku.
Title- The End

Blood still leaks,
From my opened wounds,
The war is over.

The rain wont stop,
The tears wont cease,
No one speaks.

The ground is wet,
The flowers are gone,
I am alone.

Answer 1

Cheer up Maria. Spring will return, and with it fresh flowers will arrive. I think it's a fine poem. Who cares if it isn't a Haiku.

Answer 2

O wine-bearer brighten my cup with the wine
O minstrel say good fortune is now mine.
The face of my Beloved is reflected in my cup
Little you know why with wine, I always myself align.
Eternal is the one whose heart has awakened to Love
This is how Eternal Records my life define.
So proud are the tall beauties of the world
Outshines all the others this handsome spruce of mine.
O breeze if by chance you pass through friendly gardens
From me to my Beloved, please give a sign;
Ask why you choose to forget my name?
Will come the one to whom an audience you decline.
Intoxication pleases my Beloved and my Lord
To the wine, they would assign, my life's design.
What if on Judgment Day, no favor would be gained
From eating bread and leaving a forbidden water so fine?
Hafiz, let a tear drop or two leave your eyes,
May we ensnare the Bird of Union, divine.
The sea of the skies and the gondola of the moon
With the grace of the Master, radiantly shine.

Answer 3

That isn't a haiku. A haiku has three lines ONLY with a defined number of syllables. Your poem could be classified as three badly-written haikus that don't conform to the rules of the genre, but IN NO WAY is that work, in its entirety, a haiku.

Answer 4

No its kind of depressing you must think about dying alot here is a thought try thinking about something you like to do for fun. Death keeps me the creeps! Keep writing though you might be the next Emily Dickinson!

Answer 5

That's not a haiku.

It's very cliche, to tell you the truth. It seems to be an attempt to write deep poetry, rather than the artistic result of emotion.

Answer 6

That's not a haiku... u just seem like trying to write a deep poetry.. rather than an emotion....

Answer 7

I like it, it conveys a deep sense of sadness, I imagined myself in the little scene you described and felt desolate.Its good.

Answer 8

great !!! How can you write a poem in this fantastic way !!!
i really never wrote a paragraph !!!!

Answer 9

It is good but it is not haiku

Answer 10

I LIKE IT BUT IT MAKES ME FEEL SAD!