what do you think of my new poem?

Question

my personal demons

deep down inside me this a dark thing that wants to break free it has it grasp over
over me it makes me feel like life isnt worth it all like death is the way out i try
to fight it but its taking over its making me hurt my self and people around me
it wants blood it needs alife its go ing to be the end of me the end of my life i
could feel it i could feel its plan it plans to drive me crazy it plans to take me
over and destroy all that i have all that i love but i know how to end it hurting
other peole but the only way is having to end me its the only way to stop the pain
that it would make me cause

Answer 1

did u write by yourselves or from a book............. its preety good.........

Answer 2

Appropriate title. Is this a sonnet? Is this a cry for help? Art imitating life? This better not be a suicide note, man. That wouldn't be funny. And CAME BACK TO EDIT my answer for you because I saw a few of your other questions, and, dude, please lighten up! You seem pretty morbid and perhaps if hell was waking up and finding that you survived your attempt only to become a vegetable, you might think twice before you tried. Think about it. That wouldn't be cool. Life with no parties, no remote control, no fave food, no poetry......so much left to do. So maybe you need to go to rehab. Try to remember it is your illness that is causing these bad moods. Don't let some mood fool you into doing permanent damage to yourself. It would be one way to get off drugs, but y'know, others have just quit, too. It takes time and work, but man, it's definitely better than Nurse Bertha wiping your a** for the rest of your life. I pray that you reconsider and start to heal. Blessings.

Answer 3

Too deep in regard to your life. Get with it and come alive....:)

Answer 4

Bad as the same one I just rated.Give it up,you can't write for jack sh*t.