Today is just like the day before. my eyes see nochange, I hear the same things. I feel the same relentless longing, for true chang. When will it all end? I'll forget when, I'll forget who, Where is what I always remember. Here! Lonly an sad because I remember here! Here is Where I lose all that is important. My family,my love my happyness, my good name, my dignity... THE REST IS STILL YET TO COME.
2006-06-16 16:59:08 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
Remembering here is the turning point in ones life that has been destroyed by something this person has done to bring on such unhappiness. The rest is still to come could be going in a different direction and taking on a new life style.
2006-06-16 17:13:56 · answer #1 · answered by Teaco 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Are you asking for a critique of the poem or of your state of mind?
The poem is a 'good start'. It can be even better with a little polishing. Put it aside for a few days, then reread it. When you see it in a fresh light, you will likely see many small changes you can make that will significantly improve it.
As for your 'state of mind', are you depressed?
2006-06-16 17:05:27 · answer #2 · answered by Doctor J 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow i actually enjoyed that poem. Usually i hate poems because they talk about stupid flowers and trees also seasons. This poem is deep and nice to read. I think u got some talent.
2006-06-16 17:04:37 · answer #3 · answered by klajdamo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
IT is nice and somewhat depressing yet still has a glimmer of hope deep in its words.....it needs some spelling/grammar corrections too...
2006-06-16 17:03:49 · answer #4 · answered by PEDRO 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a beautiful poem it is so beautiful I could buy it.
2006-06-16 17:03:42 · answer #5 · answered by Carry beary 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is so sad but in a sense it is a great poem
2006-06-16 17:03:23 · answer #6 · answered by hkyboy96 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its boring. in fact i didnt finish reading it.
2006-06-16 17:03:55 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its ok i like it
2006-06-16 18:50:43 · answer #8 · answered by deidre 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really nice...i can relate to it....thank u!
2006-06-16 17:25:43 · answer #9 · answered by princess_consuela 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
reminds me of "who's on first".......
2006-06-16 17:01:51 · answer #10 · answered by debi_0712 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋