Have you ever been through the same pain?
Had aches that just made you insane?
Have you ever thought of cutting yourself just because
You was unhappy at the time about who you was
Have you ever been in my shoes for a day?
Can you tell me that my life will be okay?
Have you ever been used and abused?
Cried, almost died just from being lost and confused
Have you ever stretch your mind out of shape thinking of him?
Wondering if your true love is with his friends, is he really with them?
Lowered your head after being told to never do so
Called his cell, went to his house just to know
Have you ever felt like you were lesser than you are?
Like you should stop now cause you cant make it that far
Have you ever wondered when youll ever find your true love?
Have you ever thought of your entrance thru the heavens door above?
Have you ever doubted yourself and let yourself down?
Ever thought that the friends you have now, in 13 years will they still be around?
Have you ever argued because you didnt want to be wrong?
Have you ever thought about your man all day long?
Have you ever even been in my place?
No, so why are you judging me from the expressions on my face
Do you know how it feels to be me?
Have you ever looked through me and could simply see?
How it feels to be me, youll never know, never
Have you ever wondered, have you ever?
2006-06-16 14:48:20 · 66 answers · asked by kadijah s 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
for everyone who wnats too know YES this is a true story
2006-06-26 14:39:28 · update #1
for everyone who wnats too know YES this is a true story
2006-06-26 14:39:33 · update #2
I want too thank everyone you respond and rated my peom. and its a tight one i dont know who to chioc as the best anwer
2006-06-28 12:31:42 · update #3
WOW... VERY MOVING... CUTTING ISNT THE BEST THING TO DO ... TALK TO SOMEONE WHO KNOWS YOU AND LET THEM KNOW WHAT YOU ARE FEELING... HONESTLY I WANTED TO START CUTTING LONG AGO BUT I DECIDED THAT THAT WASNT THE ANSWER FOR ME GOD WAS THE ANSWER... YES I HAD A GUY LIKE THAT THAT I JUST NEEDED TO SEE OR TALK TO HE BROKE UP WITH ME AFTER WE DID SOMETHING THAT I NOW REGRET.. BUT THATS IN THE PAST NOW I FOUND SOMEONE WHO I LOVE WE ARE MARRIED HAVE BEEN FOR NEARLY 5 YEARS.. THINKING ABOUT MY EX DID DRIVE ME INSANE UNTIL MY HUSBAND CAME INTO MY LIFE... NOW WE HAVE A DAUGHTER OF 7 MONTHS OLD... AND YES ARGUED ALL THE TIME WITH MY SISTER AND MY HUSBAND ALL THE TIME... ALL THE TIME WHEN MY SISTER CALLED ME EVERY NAME IN THE BOOK EVEN IF IT WASNT TRUE.. AND WITH KIDS THAT I WENT TO SCHOOL WITH AS WELL DID THE SAME THING BUT I SURVIVED I KNOW THAT YOU CAN AS WELL... AND DONT BE DISCOURAGED IF SOMEONE DOESNT LIKE YOUR POEMS I LIKED IT... IT DID MOVE ME... AND I AM SORRY YOU HAVE GONE THROUGH THIS OR ARE GOING THROUGH THIS... GOD IS WITH YOU ALWAYS HE SAID THAT HE WOULD NEVER LEAVE YOU NOR FORSAKE YOU...
2006-06-26 15:53:12 · answer #1 · answered by dance7378 3 · 5⤊ 1⤋
5
2006-06-28 05:18:41 · answer #2 · answered by abcinco 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8
2006-06-29 13:04:37 · answer #3 · answered by Diamond 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8 1/2
Publish it!
2006-06-16 14:55:38 · answer #4 · answered by Valkyrie 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds pretty good, you should publish it. You should like a sad person. Maybe you need to find that inner strength, that powerfull thing that comes out of you when you need it and destroys everything in it's path, try this poem.
Change, change the form of man.
Free the prince forever damned.
Free the might from fleshy mire.
Boil the blood in heart of fire.
Gone, gone the form of man,
and rise the demon Etrigan.
It's from a DC comic book hero, sounds corny but it always makes me feel better.
2006-06-30 10:23:25 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it a 8 1/2
2006-06-30 09:03:04 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You've got a true poet's soul !
i'm giving you a perfect 10 !
Hope you overcome whatever inspired this poem !
Stay cool ! And don't hurt yourself !!
You seem like a nice person that has just been hurt one too many times, don't hurt yourself because of that !! You've got a special heart and talent , share it with the world !
2006-06-28 07:27:41 · answer #7 · answered by You're just .......... 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'll give you an eight. i'm writing poems too, and to write such tragic poem, you should amplify the pain more that it could radiate this tragic feeling to the readers. why don't you use some story-telling techniques like comparing your agony to a thing, like a love gone cold is similar to a soup gone cold.
remember that there are people who do not love reading sad poems. or if they read, they don't feel it. to make your poem effective, sell your idea, learn the propaganda behind every word. don't give all details, just give a shot and let the readers think for themselves. believe me, i'm writing too. if you want i'll give you an example.
2006-06-16 15:11:42 · answer #8 · answered by pierre anne 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
10, because its not really what other people think. A poem is an expression of your feelings....don't ever quit doing it. Don't let people get you down. Have you ever tried publishing any of your poems? go to poetry.com to find out more, and feel free to check out my stuff while you're there. Do a name search for Amanda Beth Stark
And GOOD LUCK!
2006-06-29 11:15:01 · answer #9 · answered by mandibeth18 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Deal with it,grow stronger.I`m in constant pain from neuropathy and an inoperable disc in the back,cause of the other meds I take,heart problems,stroke.Suck it up.You can get thru this."When you`re going thru hell,keep moving."W.Churchill.
I have this on a magnet on my fridge.Be well.
2006-06-27 09:00:31 · answer #10 · answered by Rich B 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋