What Yall Think?

Question

We're givena certin expectation
Sum wit sum witout motivation
In order to maintain r future nation
Respectably question our elders wishes
Confused and bewildered by riddles that life dishes
Out to us, us the growing generation
Who are thrown mixed messages about education
The importance to learn and mature
Countered by urban music and beliefs that ensure
We should be reduced to selling toxicants of the mind
As teenagers look into our life as it begins to wind
Down an endless pit of shame and self-destruction
Inflicted by only ourselves, who are in need of self-unction
Unction that anoints our given right to successfully reign
Over our nation though all of lifes pleasure and pain
Our elders criticize and chastise
Knowingly immobilize
Our preordained fate of selling burgers and fries
We the future aknoleged by neither shape nor size
Can and will rise
To meet our mentors cries
And uphold our nation as were apprised
With information needd for a solid foundation
To become our next generatio

Answer 1

Thats real hot, but on some real.....ppl on this site could be dirty. You don't want nobody to steal your work....thats deep....WHAT THE MUSIC WORLD NEEDS! Especially rap....this dirty south garbage gets kinda old kinda quick. It has no depth. Lyrics to music are a form of lyric poetry, and poetry should tell a story. That's definately bangin....you need to school some of these idiots tryin to make music now.

Answer 2

I like some of the expansion of vocabulary. I will suggest adding some internal rhyming and some tightening as far as sylables are concerned. You might not want to put your lyrics on the web, though. Seeing as how easy it would be for someone to steal it and claim it as thier own.

Answer 3

Interesting. You could make a song out of those thoughts.

Answer 4

too long didnt read . Keep up the good work.

Answer 5

Nice poem, but what is the question?