A person birth in a beautiful world with hopes and desires;
Beautiful illusion of this world don't make him aware of fire...
Fire of crime, fire of criminals and fire of nature,
Fire of sentiments, fire of emotions and fire of destructive creature.
He nourishes his hopes and his desires;
He increases his imaginations and never he tires.
The wolrd look healthy, good and superior;
He makes him self concious and shows the world inferior.
That man grows younger, nearer to his death;
What a rubbish poem, a worst attempt...
Now, I should stop because I think You all are now completely bored...
Prasun Saurav
2006-06-11 23:49:01 · 6 answers · asked by Prasun Saurav 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
:) not bad attempt ma dear
keep it up u will improve !
good luck !
2006-06-11 23:55:18 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
well it would have helped to have a complete poem. its hard to follow
a person birth? you mean a person's birth?
what does "that man grows younger, nearer to his death" mean?
very hard to follow. altho in its own way it has potential. don't quit!
the only way you get better is to continue to write
2006-06-12 07:01:59 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey man its not that way i think it is the kind ofpoem i like u knowe what i love it i sware dude dont give up keep trying
2006-06-12 06:57:45 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't worry no one is bored off this becuase no one read it actually. Everyone made two ponts more.
2006-06-12 07:10:55 · answer #4 · answered by buttar506 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You made an attempt so it was alright
2006-06-12 20:54:52 · answer #5 · answered by silhouette 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if it is ur poem then
GOOD EFFORT
2006-06-12 06:57:26 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋