it doesn't have a title yet, but tell me what you think.
I woke up today in pain,
The rain outside drenched my tears.
The people here laugh at my scars,
They make my worst nigtmares become real fears.
Am I really existing?
Or am I just one of the crowd?
Can I make my dreams come true?
Or will I just sit and try to be heard?...
That's all i have so far. i'll add more later. :)
2006-06-11 17:40:35 · 13 answers · asked by ???? 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
yeah, my life is pretty sad. let's see:
-my mom could die any day
-my dad is getting re-married
-all my friends are fighting because of me
-all the people at my school make fun of me because i am smart
-i can't decide whether to go to a charter school that will help me persue my dream or to go to the school where all my friends are going
my life sucks. :(
2006-06-11 17:59:32 · update #1
Not too bad.
It sounds alot like some of the poetry I wrote when I was a teen. Wrote this when I was around 14 or 15. Keep writing, it is good to get all those emotions down on paper. I have poetry book that I have had for more than 25 years. I still add poems to it. Get a nice covered journal book, and write down your poetry. It's amazing to look back over the 25 years or so I have been writing poetry and see how it changes over the years.
Good Luck and keep writing!
The Glass Girl
I am invisible
A glass girl.
I see the world,
Yet is seems not
To see me.
Am I not worthy
To be seen?
I have seen
Other, invisible people.
But pretended
Not to see.
Hoping I would
Become visible.
2006-06-11 17:42:50 · answer #1 · answered by Evilest_Wendy 6 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Hey its a lovely poem. My advice is if your poems are going to be really helpful to YOU!!put a ray of light into them, the hope lies within you so its really up to you. Keep writing you do have the potential, but write so you can get rid of your problems and create new solutions, new beautiful solutions can come out of the same creative mind that wrote that poem, you have the POWER!!
2006-06-12 05:36:24 · answer #2 · answered by player 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a great poem. I too have been made fun of for being smart and I just ignore them because I say who will have a job later on me or him. hmmm..
I can't say much because i haven't been through all that, but i will pray for you.
2006-06-12 02:20:18 · answer #3 · answered by Jeff 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its pretty good! but if you're really feeling that way, id suggest doing something, like talking to someone, or reading a self help book. it's not good to keep those feelings bottled up, so poetry is a great way to help cope too
2006-06-12 00:48:36 · answer #4 · answered by babyhalo19 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
LOVELY.
Enter it into a poetry contest.
I got mine published and it won out of many of them.
I think its www.americanpoets.com
Something like that, but if you do a search in potry contests, you will be able to submit your poems and win.
2006-06-12 00:45:07 · answer #5 · answered by geniusflightnurse 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My lord woman forget your poem and get to the hospital.
2006-06-12 00:43:07 · answer #6 · answered by Pup 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not my cup of tea. But you like it keep going.
2006-06-12 00:45:23 · answer #7 · answered by usserydog 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think its good, but I'm hoping its not about you. How sad!
2006-06-12 00:47:00 · answer #8 · answered by Christie D 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it -- sounds like you're not too happy though...I'd get some help.
2006-06-12 00:43:25 · answer #9 · answered by Manrolls 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sad
2006-06-12 00:45:38 · answer #10 · answered by JAmes 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋