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Question

What style of writing is this called? Im trying to write a story but I need tips on diffrent writing styles.

“Mom, I’m back,” I called, walking into the house. Patrick closed the front door behind him, adjusting his book bag strap. There was a faint reply from one of the other rooms, and I walked into the kitchen, going to the fridge first. “Soda?”

“Sure,” Patrick said. I grabbed two cans for us and headed up the stairs mindful that my dad wouldn’t be home for awhile. That was good, considering he always brought up some ridiculous comment that suggested Patrick and I were an ‘item’. That couldn’t be farther from the truth. As cliché as it sounds, I view Patrick as some sort of sibling, or something like that. It’s not a sibling thing really, but I mean to say that we have nothing going. Never have, never will. I know he feels the same, though there was a brief incident back in our sophomore year. He came up with a whole stuttering speech about how he felt something more than frie

Answer 1

Well, you're using a casual style of prose. It doesn't have a "special" category, except that it's written from first person point of view.

That said, though, you need to correct several problems if your example is part of your actual prose.

First, it's generally not convention to switch between first and third person points of view in a story, unless your story is written as a first person narrator telling a story he experienced as a third party (which would give you short bits as the narrator explained things from his point of view, and then change over to third person as the actual story unfolded), and you should not do it in the middle of a scene.

Since you are the narrator of the story, your point of view doesn't really get to switch like that. If you say "I called, walking into the house", and no other characters have come with you, then you've established that you're Patrick. You wouldn't say after that "Patrick closed the front door behind him", because we generally don't refer to ourselves in third person. That's reserved specifically for talking about other people we aren't directly addressing at the moment.

If Patrick is another character, you need to establish him as separate from you and identify his actions as he makes them (for instance, in this scene it appears he was following you through the door, and yet your phrasing makes it appear as if he was just standing around by the door idly doing nothing while you walked in, or else you are talking about yourself from two points of view).

Remember just about the biggest no-no in fiction is deus ex machina. You've got to put your props (and everything's a prop in your Universe, even characters) where they have to be and make sure everyone knows they're there before you use them so you're not just "yanking them out of mid-air".

Second, you need to separate your dialogue from your descriptive paragraphs, so it looks like this:

"Mom, I'm back," I called, as Patrick and I walked into the house.

Patrick closed the front door behind us, adjusting the strap on his book bag as he did...."

and

"Soda?"

"Sure," Patrick said.

I grabbed two cans for us and headed..."

Other than that, it looks like you're writing a first person narrative.

If you would like additional help, feel free to ask. =)

Answer 2

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Answer 3

This is called the first person narrative and is the second-most-common approach used in fiction writing.

Answer 4

I dont know but I like the story

Answer 5

does she give Patrick a handjob or not?