You are my lover
happinesses shower
The brightness of my universe
The sun, comforte of my life
The only person in my dreams
The only person in my heart
The only person who i care about
The only possesion of my life
The only person in my mind
The only person in my thoughts
The only reason of my life
And most of all the only person who i truly love with all my heart!
2006-06-10 02:21:10 · 11 answers · asked by sherry 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
it's nice in that it conveys affection, but there is an undertone of stalkiness to it imho.
Couldn't resist rewording it, feel free to take ideas from this:
brightest star in all the world
the sun shines to me from you
a universe created in my dreams
where all my thoughts are true
the only person in my mind
how it it you outshine
the brightness of my universe?
the only reason for life is you
and so you bring me comfort
happinesses shower to me from you
and I love you truly with all of my heart
2006-06-10 02:54:36 · answer #1 · answered by frid 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it deosnt really read like a poem, sounds more like song lyrics to me. the rhythm doesnt flow like in a poem.
2006-06-10 03:35:20 · answer #2 · answered by ladyjinx 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its quite a nice poem for somebody special in your life
2006-06-10 02:24:44 · answer #3 · answered by misty 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
So unrealistic about ur own life.
2006-06-10 02:27:21 · answer #4 · answered by psaloni73 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's ok it's nice thats it
2006-06-10 02:57:21 · answer #5 · answered by tweetypie88888 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
aw...i got a lump in me throat
2006-06-10 02:36:32 · answer #6 · answered by bigpete767 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good innocent.but life is not like that .......in practical life its boring and waisting of time.
2006-06-10 02:31:28 · answer #7 · answered by gemglaze 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad.But I think you could do much better.
2006-06-10 02:25:13 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
all i can say .. it's great
2006-06-10 02:45:56 · answer #9 · answered by didi 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
BEUTIFUL
2006-06-10 02:30:00 · answer #10 · answered by spiderman 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋