Is this a good poem to tell a girl you really like?

Question

My chest beats in synchronous rhythm with yours;
My arms wrap around your swaying hips;
My fingers perfectly spaced between yours;

Your soft warm breath against my neck;
Your smooth hands curious to explore;
Your forehead beaded with sweat
Makes you even more beautiful than before;

You lay your head on my chest and the beats beat a bit faster;
You go ahead and smile now;
You do make me nervous;
Am I holding you right, not too tight right?

I'd like to tell it to this girl that I like while im slow dancing with her at my dance. Because she likes this older guy and she doest see that hes a douchebag.

Answer 1

I like it very cute