One day I took the train,
Across from me was a girl.
When I saw her, my heart did a twirl,
For I knew she was the one.
I ventured near to her,
And asked her name.
Said the fine dame,
Her name was Rose.
Ah, what a beautiful name,
Is the name Rose.
When I hear that name my heart glows,
As bright as the sun.
Alas though,
She got off at the next stop.
And my heart did flop,
For never again did I see her.
To this day,
When I look at a rose, my heart cries.
And I look to the skies,
Wondering, wondering, what became of Rose.
(i thought of this myself and had no help do you like it?)
2006-06-06 03:25:51 · 25 answers · asked by Sammy Hagar 3 in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
Very impressive...evern more if it was inspired by a real life event.
2006-06-06 03:27:11 · answer #1 · answered by shae 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Is the poem for real ? It may smell like an amateur work, but it feels beautiful. For a self-composed poem, it shows talent. Keep up the good work !
2006-06-06 03:29:21 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Do you think this is a question? In fact you wanted to show your prose to us to appreciate your capabilities. Thanks for that. Of course you can be a good writer of fictions. Go ahead. Can't say without knowing His wish whether God will bless you or not, but my bleesings are with you.
2006-06-06 03:32:20 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you have a ways to go yet-but already better than i have ever done-never was much on writing it but like to read it and sometimes you find one you can just get lost in-this wasnt one of those but think inside you is more-keep the peace old hippie
2006-06-06 03:30:31 · answer #4 · answered by bergice 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Keep looking for her, don't give up on true love!!!! Your heart may never feel like that again....then if you do find her, write a book, and make millions!!!!! Good luck!!!!!
2006-06-06 03:30:48 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's alright, although "dame" means she's a married woman.
2006-06-06 03:30:00 · answer #6 · answered by Shep 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's o.k. I think it's nice that you want to share it. Go to poetry.com and you can share with others who have the same interests.
2006-06-06 03:29:06 · answer #7 · answered by Einsteinetta 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Oh my God that is so sweet. I like that you can express yourself especially through a poem most guys don't do that. ( it's a good thing ) I really do like it
2006-06-06 03:28:32 · answer #8 · answered by mdwillridge 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is a god's power
god say in quarn :in my power creating love between man and women for create family and born child and....
love is base of socity
2006-06-06 03:33:52 · answer #9 · answered by rezazandieh 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Absolutely beautiful! Very picturesque and believable. Keep up the good work. If you have any more to share, please send them to me at haven.johnson@yahoo.com- I love poetry!
2006-06-06 03:29:46 · answer #10 · answered by Haven Johnson 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋