Would someone please PROOFREAD/EDIT this piece of writing for me? Please?

Question

I don't know my writing sounds a bit amaturish and I would like it sounds a little bit more professional-like. Also, please check if there are incorrect grammars.
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This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic that focuses on a comedic story about a sadistic mom, who flips out because her son receiving a B+ on his report card. For the most part, the comic was very straightforward. However, the most difficult part was the organization. When I did a pre sketch of these sketches, I felt it a little disorganized. I felt like I was missing something, a guide or some sort -- it was the dialogue, as a friend of mine suggested. After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. Not only it allowed me to work faster, but also it boosted my creativity by helping me on imagining the scenes for each sketches. Overall, two of things that I like most about this artwork were the freedom that I could express through the characters, and the creators were having fun

oops.. please delete the "sadistic" mom... wrong adjective choice...

Answer 1

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic that focuses on a comedic story about a sadistic mom, who flips out because her son receiving a B+ on his report card. For the most part, the comic was very straightforward, with the organization being the most complex part. When I completed a pre sketch of these drawings, I felt it was a little disorganized as though I was missing something, perhaps a guide to the work. After analyzing what was needed, it was decided the dialogue was the key. After completing the dialogue, all the sketches were completed without difficulty. Finishing the dialogue allowed me to complete my work faster, and also boosted my creativity by helping me to imagine the scenes for each sketch clearly. Overall, two of things that I like most about this artwork were the freedom that I could express through the characters, and that the creators were having fun

Answer 2

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial or comics that focuses on a comedy about a sadistic mom who flips out because her son has received a B+ on his report card.

For most parts, the comic is very straightforward. However, I find that the most difficult part to do was the organization. When I did a pre-sketch, I felt a little disorganized. I felt like I was missing something: a guide or some sort. It was the dialogue I was missing, as a friend of mine suggested. After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. Not only did the dialogue allowed me to work faster, but it also boosted my creativity by helping me to imagine the scenes for each sketch. Overall, the things that I liked most about doing this artwork were the feeling of freedom that I could express through the characters and the fun I had creating it.

Answer 3

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic that focuses on a comedic story about a sadistic mom, who flips out because her son received a B+ on his report card. For the most part, the comic is very straightforward. However, the most difficult part is the organization. When I did a pre sketch of these sketches, I felt it was a little disorganized. I felt like I was missing out something, a guide or some sort. It was the dialogue, as a friend of mine suggested. After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. Not only did it allow me to work faster, it also boosted my creativity by helping me on imagining the scenes for each sketches. Overall, two things that I like most about this artwork were the freedom that I could express through the characters, and the creators were having fun

Answer 4

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic. The work focuses on a comedic story about a sadistic mom, who flips out because her son receiving a B+ on his report card.
For the most part, the comic was very straightforward. However, the most difficult part was the organization. When I did a pre- sketch of these sketches, I felt it a little disorganized. I felt like I was missing something, a guide or some sort. As a friend of mine suggested, it was the dialogue.
After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. This not only it allowed me to work faster, but also it boosted my creativity by helping me to imagine the scenes for each of the sketches. Overall, two of things that I like most about this artwork were the freedom that I could express through the characters, and the creators were having fun.



I am not sure about ...and they creators were having fun.
was this a group project?
the last sentence seem still a bit unclear to me.

Sounds pretty good though, I bet it turned out well.

Answer 5

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic which focuses on a comedic story about a tyrannical mom, who flips out because her son received a B+ on his report card. For the most part, the comic was very straightforward. However, the most difficult part was the organization. When I did the pre-sketch, I felt it a little disorganized. Like I was missing something, a guide or some sort -- it was the style of dialogue, as a friend of mine suggested. After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. Not only did it allow me to work faster, but also it boosted my creativity by helping me on imagination front in the scenes and for each sketch. Overall, two of things that I like most about this artwork were the freedom that I could express through the characters, and the creators were having fun

Answer 6

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic that focuses on a comedic story about a sadistic mom, who flips out because her son has received a B+ on his report card. For the most part, the comic was very straightforward. However, the most difficult part was the organization. When I did a pre sketch, I felt it was a little disorganized. I felt like I was missing something, a guide or some sort -- it was the dialogue, as a friend of mine suggested. After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. Not only did it allow me to work faster, but also it boosted my creativity by helping me imagine the scenes for each sketch. Overall, the two of things that I enjoyed most about this work, was the freedom that I could express through the characters, and that the creators were having fun.

Answer 7

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic that focuses on a comic story about a sadistic mom, who flips out because her son receives a B+ on his report card. For the most part, the comic was very straightforward. However, the most difficult part was the organization. When I did a pre sketch of these sketches, I felt that it was a little disorganized. I felt like I was missing something, a guide or some sort -- it was the dialogue, as a friend of mine suggested. After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. Not only it allowed me to work faster, but also it boosted my creativity by helping me on imagining the scenes for each sketches. Overall, two of things that I like most about this artwork were the freedom that I could express through the characters, and the creators were having fun



This should suffice i believe

Answer 8

This artwork consists of a framed pictorial/comic that focuses on a comedic story about a mom, who flips out because her SON'S receiving a B+ on his report card. For the most part, the comic was very straightforward. However, the most difficult part was the organization. When I did a pre sketch of these sketches, I felt it a little disorganized. I felt like I was missing something, a guide or some sort -- it was the dialogue, as a friend of mine suggested. After I finished the dialogue, all the sketches were done fairly quickly. Not only it allowed me to work faster, but also it boosted my creativity by helping me on imagining the scenes for each sketches. Overall, two of things that I like most about this artwork were the freedom that I could express through the characters, and the creators were having fun. REST OF THE DOCUMENT'S OK

Answer 9

I've edited for you......

Change it to RECEIVED a B+

Change, a guide or some sort, to
a guide OF some sort

You wrote: Not only it allowed..Should be.....
Not only did it allow me..

After you wrote work faster..you put a comma after the word faster. Incorrect. There should be no comma because of the word 'but' after it. The comma is supperlative.

You wrote: but also it boosted
Should be: but it also boosted

You wrote: imagining the scenes for each sketches..It should be sketch

You wrote: and the creators were having fun
It should be..and the creators that were having fun<<<

Place a period after the word fun.

Hope this helps. It will definitly make it sound more professional and mature.

Good Luck! You did great! Just a few minor adjustments
were needed.

Answer 10

ok

where it says Sadistic mom, *mother. who *overreacts
Flips out is more..modern and kid like.
Take out the word However.
I felt somewhat disorganized. A friend suggested that i should create a guide or a dialogue to help me.

They allowed me to work faster by boosting my creativity. It helped me to imagine the scenes for each sketch quicker than before.
Overall, two things that I enjoyed the most were; The Freedom I had been able to express through the characters and the fact that we all had fun, even the creators.

Enjoy! You can fix and take out and just make it your own.
Hope you liked it.