Anyone here fluent in english (second and last part my essay)?

Question

Is there anything incorrect in this paragraph ? Something that acnnot be said in English ? Plz help and feel free to suggest any changes

Of course there were situations that put me down and ones that affected my academic records either positively or negatively. The fact that I traveled a lot made me respectful of those who comes from different cultural backgrounds and made me fluent in three languages, and I am looking for more: I would love to learn Spanish someday. As a negative situation I would mention a recent one: I had two jobs and was a full time student and was so overwhelmed that I couldn’t do everything at once and in the end I had to drop one of my classes . Of course I took it again and passed it with a B+. This was both a negative and a positive experience : it is true that it cost me money and time, but since then I understood that my only full time job is being a student.

Answer 1

Continuing my grammatical corrections from your first post...

Of course, there were situations that affected my academic records either positively or negatively. The fact that I traveled a lot made me more respectful of those who come from different cultural backgrounds and also made me fluent in three languages. I am looking forward to learning Spanish someday. One of my negative situations, quite recently, I had two jobs and was also a full-time student. I was so overwhelmed that I couldn’t do everything at once and, in the end, I had to drop one of my classes. Of course, I took it again and completed with a B+. However, this negative experience does have a bright side. It is true that it costs me money and time, but since then I have understood that my only full-time job is being a student.

Good luck.

Answer 2

Of course there were situations that put me down and ones that affected my academic records either positively or negatively. The fact that I travelled a lot made me respectful of those who come from different cultural backgrounds and made me fluent in three languages, and I am looking for more: I would love to learn Spanish someday. but i had a few negative experiences like having two jobs and was a full time student and was so overwhelmed that I couldn’t do everything at once and in the end I had to drop one of my classes . Of course I took it again and passed it with a B+. This was both a negative and a positive experience : it is true that it cost me money and time, but since then I understood that my only full time job is being a student.

Answer 3

There were situations that put me down and ones that affected my academic records either positively or negatively. The fact that I traveled a lot made me respectful of those whom come from different cultural backgrounds and made me fluent in three languages and I am looking for more; I would love to learn Spanish someday.

As a negative situation I would mention a recent one; I had two jobs and was a full time student and was so overwhelmed that I couldn’t do everything at once and in the end I had to drop one of my classes . I took it again and passed it with a B+. This was both a negative and a positive experience. It is true that it cost me money and time but since then I understood that my only full time job is being a student.

Answer 4

Hope this helps.

Of course there were situations that put me down and ones that affected my academic records positively and negatively. The fact that I traveled a lot made me respectful of those who come from different cultural backgrounds. I am fluent in three languages, and still would love to learn Spanish someday. A recent negative situation was that I had two jobs, was a full time student and so overwhelmed having to do everything at once. In the end I had to drop one of my classes, but took it again and passed it with a B+. Although it’s true that it cost me time and money, these negative and positive experiences have lead me to the understanding that my only full time job is being a student.

Answer 5

I've made several changes to the paragraph. This is what it looks like now:

Naturally there have been situations which have put me down, as well as ones that have impacted my studies either positively or negatively. My frequent travels have made me respectful of those who come from different cultural backgrounds, and has inspired me to learn and become fluent in three languages, and still I am looking for more: I would love to learn Spanish someday. As for a negative impact I would mention a recent one: I had two jobs and was also a full time student, but was so overwhelmed because I couldn’t handle all of them simultaneously and in the end I had to drop one of my classes. I took it up again subsequently and managed to pass it with a B+. This experience has been a double-edged sword, since it cost me money and time, but it has also allowed me to understand that my only full time job is being a student.

Yep, hope that helps ;)

Answer 6

Hi. I've corrected some things for you. Other's are welcome to correct me! lol

"There were absolutely situations that discouraged, and others that affected my academic record both positively and negatively. The fact that I am an avid traveler has made me respectful of those from different cultural backgrounds from mine. It has also made me fluent in three languages and I am looking forward to learning more. I would love to learn Spanish in the future. Concerning a negative situation, I had two jobs while studying as a full time student. I was overwhelmed to the point where I could no longer multitask. As a result, I discontinued with one of my classes. However, I took it again and successfully passed it with a B+. I found this to be both a negative and a positive experience in that it had cost me money and time, however since then I came to the realization that my only full time job is that of being a student."

Answer 7

Yes.
.. situations that had.. me down.. change travelled "a lot" to quite a bit... made me to caused me to be... those who comes is incorrect: should be those who had come..
and made me,,, better to say, "Had caused me to be fluent".. you changed syntax.. in I am looking for more... all else was past tense and then you changed to current. "As a negative situation I would .. recent one".. makes no sense at all. Instead, say, "I will now provide you with a negative situation I recently came across". I understood.. to my//job is... should be either I understand .. my job is.. or, I understood.. my job was... Keep your tenses correct and fluent!

Answer 8

In the second sentence you have the word comes-it should be come. Also I believe where you use : it should be ; Not positive about that though!!

Answer 9

what is your problem? Besides spelling?
The total tone is not one that you want me to answer to. I'm sure your family is so proud of you to do so well at trying to be American.

Answer 10

respectful of those who comes from different cultural backgrounds
should be:
respect those who come from different cultural backgrounds...