It's my uncle's Profile. help Me
Mr. Hong-min Choi has studied about the Choral music of the world and tried to make globalization of Korean Choral Music.
He graduated from Han-yang University with a Bachelor of Music degree. And he has completed a Master of Music degree in Dan-kook music graduate school and also gcompleted the Conducting Course of Westminster Choir College. He participated chorus symposium and Choral Festival of the world and master unique choral music of each of global conductors. Now, he is trying to attempt to integrate Korean Choral Music into global.
Mr.Choi was awarded of the whole nation chorus contest, 14 timew of first prizes, 8 times of highest award and won honors by the president. Now he stands unchallenged with energetic and capable in present Korea's Choral world and has achieved recognition as a choral conductor.Especially, he is in pursuit of perfect harmony. Also he leads Puchon Mother's Choir, Puchon Father's Choir, and Seoul Geumcheon Choir.
2006-06-05 13:52:18 · 3 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
I live in Korea.
We have to give this paper(profile) to
American Conductor . I wrote this, but I am not sure about grammar.
I am not sure if it makes sense or not.
Please help me.
2006-06-05 13:55:05 · update #1
You spelled times wrong.
Do not start a sentence with "and".
This sentence has a few errors "Mr.Choi was awarded OF the whole nation chorus contest, 14 timew(switch w to s) first prizes, 8 times highest award and won honors by the president." when you say 14 times first prizes get rid of the time. Get rid of the capitalized OF. replace it with the word in. When you say 8 times highest award get rid of the times and make the award plural. Now you sentence should look like this:
"Mr. Choi was awarded in the nation (get rid of whole) chorus contest. 14 first prizes, 8 highest honors and won honors by the president." That might not be everything so keep looking for errors.
2006-06-05 14:08:38 · answer #1 · answered by fanatic 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's my uncle's Profile. help Me
Mr. Hong-min Choi has studied about the Choral music of the world and tried to make globalization of Korean Choral Music.
He graduated from Han-yang University with a Bachelor of Music degree. And he has completed a Master of Music degree in Dan-kook music graduate school and also completed the Conducting Course of Westminster Choir College. He participated in chorus symposium and Choral Festival of the world and master unique choral music of each of global conductors. Now, he is trying to attempt to integrate Korean Choral Music into global.
Mr.Choi was awarded of the whole nation chorus contest, first prizes 14 times, eight times of highest award and won honors by the president. Now he stands unchallenged with energetic and capable in present Korea's Choral world and has achieved recognition as a choral conductor. Especially, he is in pursuit of perfect harmony. Also, he leads Puchon Mother's Choir, Puchon Father's Choir, and Seoul Geumcheon Choir.
2006-06-05 14:04:44 · answer #2 · answered by cmhurley64 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
all good
2006-06-05 13:56:25 · answer #3 · answered by The Rebel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋