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在一個阿拉斯加的冒險，那是一個非常漂亮的地方，有一座北美最高的高山，而老鷹就在上面飛翔，在這裡，有非常多的野生動物，有很漂亮的駝鹿，也有灰熊帶著幼熊在河邊抓魚，那種魚的名稱叫作鮭魚，在阿拉斯加，處處充滿驚奇，因為在這裡，可以看到我們平常所看不到的野生動物，這真是太棒的一個地方阿


What other adventures are there at a very beautiful place in Alaska
There is a tallest mountain in North America and eagles fly above the mountain.
There is much wildlife over there.
For example, there are moose、grillzy beer and salmon.
We can see the grillzy beer’s cub that it is planning to catch the salmon.
It is amazing everywhere in Alaska.
We can meet much rare wildlife over there.
What a wonderful place there！
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在一個阿拉斯加的冒險，那是一個非常漂亮的地方，
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Answer 1

在一個阿拉斯加的冒險，那是一個非常漂亮的地方，有一座北美最高的高山，而老鷹就在上面飛翔，在這裡，有非常多的野生動物，有很漂亮的駝鹿，也有灰熊帶著幼熊在河邊抓魚，那種魚的名稱叫作鮭魚，在阿拉斯加，處處充滿驚奇，因為在這裡，可以看到我們平常所看不到的野生動物，這真是太棒的一個地方阿

Alaska is a beautiful thrill-seeking country.
There is a tallest mountain in North America where eagles fly above.
Wildlife is aplenty here. There are many moose and grillzy bears bringing their young to catch
fishes by (along) the river. This type of fish is called “salmon”.

In Alaska, everywhere is filled with excitement.
Here, we get to see wildlife animals whereby we hardly see in our everyday life.

This is indeed a wonderful place!

Answer 2

Alaska with a tallest mountain of north america is a beautiful place for taking adventures.
as you can see the eagles fly above the mountains.
in addition,There are lot of wild animals around there like moose、grillzy bear that takes her children to catch fish called salmon.
It is full of surprising ,because you can see the naturalwild animals that you have never seen before. it is just great,isn't it?*****