修改英文文法~15點歐!!

Question

如題~以下有兩篇文章的前後需要修改~!
文法有錯的地方在修改就好了~!!謝謝：）

My best way to learn English

In Taiwan, every one can speak English, including children; middle-ager and so on.
But a lot of people didn’t like to speak English, because they are afraid of English grammar are wrong. So they didn’t like to speak English. I have many best ways to learn English; they are four parts, including listening, speaking, reading and writing.

Finally, if you follow all of steps, likes listen to western music, talk in English everyday, reading English magazines and writing diary in English you will getting good English.



The best way to lose weight

It seems that many people today are overweight. No one wants to carry around extra pounds, lout few people know how to slum down effectively. They look for miracle pills and magic cures. In the end, they fail and the pounds come back. But the most effective way of losing weight is actually very simple. There are several ways to lose weight are following.

Finally, if you follow all of steps, likes dink 2000cc per day, don’t eat fast food, Do exercise for up to 30mins everyday and Go to bed early you will getting beautiful and handsome. Best of all, everyone was able to stay at her ideal weight.

大大您好~如所說的大致上我都知道哪裡錯!!
唯獨這一條... lout few people know how to [ slum] down effectively.
框起來的我不知道該怎麼改~可否跟我說一下呢??

Answer 1

你寫得很好,大致上沒問題, 我只框框你不小心的地方,我確信你都知道答了.



My best way to learn English

In Taiwan, every one can speak English, including children; middle-ager and so on.
But a lot of people [didn’t] like to speak English, because they are afraid of( their) English grammar are wrong. So they [ didn’t] like to speak English. I have many best ways to learn English; they are four parts, including listening, speaking, reading and writing.

Finally, if you follow all of ( the) steps, [likes][listen] to western music,[ talk] in English everyday, reading English magazines and writing diary in English you will [getting] good English.


The best way to lose weight

It seems that many people today are overweight. No one wants to carry around extra pounds, lout few people know how to [ slum] down effectively. They look for miracle pills and magic cures. In the end, they fail and the pounds come back. But the most effective way of losing weight is actually very simple. There are several ways to lose weight [are] following.

Finally, if you follow all of steps, likes dink 2000cc [per]day, don’t eat fast food, Do exercise[ for up to ]30mins everyday and Go to bed early you will [getting] beautiful and handsome. Best of all, everyone was able to stay at her ideal weight.

2007-12-24 13:15:58 補充：
句型結構很好, 充分表達主題,
因此我知道你的文法不錯,
檢查一下小細節; 所以你知道出錯的地方.
我不告訴你該如何改, 對你沒幫助.