如題...
英文內容:
one day santa is sick.
his doughter help him to give the gifts.
she gives the gifts to everybody.
she finished,but she is tired,so she is go home.
2007-12-19 16:12:29 · 3 個解答 · 發問者 LKK 3 in 社會與文化 ➔ 語言
恩...
還有件事要請大家幫忙!!
我寫好了,可是被退件!!
因為字數太少了=_="""
所以想請大家幫我多加一點...
2007-12-21 14:14:38 · update #1
你的文章應該是要用 "過去式" 來表達的，
如下：
One day, Santa was sick.
His daughter helped him to give the gifts.
She gave the gifts to everybody.
She finished but she was tired, so she went home.
改好了.............
2007-12-21 08:53:41 補充：
信偶得永生啦................
2007-12-19 16:29:30 · answer #1 · answered by Raymond0207 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Santa got sick in a few days before Christmas.
His daughter decided to help him deliver the gifts.
She gave the gifts to every good girl and good boy.
After she finished the work, she was tired and went home, North Pole.
2007-12-19 21:04:13 · answer #2 · answered by Ahoo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
One say Santa Claus was sick, and his daughter took over his mission to bring the the gifts to everybody. When she finished, she felt exhausted, so she went home.
這種說故事的事情，我覺得用過去式會比較好，所以將你的時式全改為過去式，為了接下他以前送禮物給其他人的任務的感覺，我另外補上了take over，讓句子更有連續性。
2007-12-19 21:49:09 補充：
第一行後面多了一個the
2007-12-19 16:47:30 · answer #3 · answered by 黃阿綸 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋