請幫忙修改這篇短文，謝謝！

Question

這是我寫的一個小短文，但不知道文法對不對…



而且我寫不到二百字…能的話幫忙加幾句話吧！



請懂英文的前輩們幫忙改正錯誤的地方，非常感謝^^



If I were a freshman


The flying over as fast as four years of my college live. During that time, the ones that cross are still quite good. For all that, I was discontent with something. Maybe I was not mature enough.


If I can turn back times, if I were a freshman, I wish I know how to handle time to do more important things, example of improve technical ability, join some interesting association, have a part-time job to make money after class and spend more time to get along with family. The most important thing is keep a bright mood and friendly disposition. Your attitude decides what your life would be.


I know that I can’t change passed things, so I appreciate what I have right now and seize the day.

Answer 1

I rewrite it. Hope this help you a lot.

I wish I were a college freshman again

The flying over as fast as four years of my college live. During that time, the ones that cross are still quite good. For all that, I was discontent with something. Maybe I was not mature enough.

--> (Where is your verb in your first sentence? Also, live -> life) Time flies. My four years college life passed. I was not satisfied with my college life since I didn't grow up in the past four years.

If I can turn back times, if I were a freshman , I wish I know how to handle time to do more important things, example of, improve technical ability, (to)join some interesting association (societyes), have(to take) a part-time job to make money after class and (having able to)spend more time to get along with family. The most important thing is (to)keep a bright mood and friendly disposition. Your attitude decides what your life would be.

--> If time could go back to my first year in college, I wish I learned to utilize my time to do more important things, such as improving technical knowledges, participating in clubs, having a part time job, and spending more time with my family. ???? (I can't understand what you mean here. you might mean: The most important thing is to make yourself live happily everyday, right?)

I know that I can’t change passed things, so I appreciate what I have right now and seize the day.
-->I know that I can't change past things. ??? What I can do right now is catching my time.

Answer 2

If I were a freshman
The flying over as fast as four years of my college live. During that time, the ones that cross are still quite good. For all that, I was discontent with something. Maybe I was not mature enough.
>>>Time flies, in the four years of my college life, everything just go smoothly, but maybe I am not mature enough to content with that kind of living,
If I can turn back times, if I were a freshman, I wish I know how to handle time to do more important things, example of improve technical ability, join some interesting association, have a part-time job to make money after class and spend more time to get along with family. The most important thing is keep a bright mood and friendly disposition. Your attitude decides what your life would be.
>>>If I could return to my former time, I wish I could control my time to do more important things; such as to improve my technique ability, join some interesting club, and leave some time to do the part-time job. The most important thing is to spend more time to get along with my families with a brightened mood.
I know that I can’t change passed things, so I appreciate what I have right now and seize the day.
>>>Of course, I know that I could not change any things which passer-by, but I can seize my present time to live a more meaningful life!.

Answer 3

If I were a freshman
( I wish I were a college freshman )




The ( Time) flying over as fast as four years of my college live. During that time, the ones that cross are still quite good. For all that, I was discontent with something. Maybe I was not( havn't got) mature enough.








If I can ( could) turn back times, if I were a freshman (again), I wish I know(knew) how to handle time to do more important things,(for) example[of], (to) improve technical ability, (to)join some interesting association (societyes), have(to take) a part-time job to make money after class and (having able to)spend more time to get along with family. The most important thing is (to)keep a bright mood and friendly disposition. Your attitude decides what your life would be.








I know that I can’t change passed( past ) things, so I appreciate what I have (own)right now and seize the day.