有誰可以幫我修改一下句型和文法

Question

My Favorite Sport
My favorite sport is baseball. It's interesing for me to play baseball and it make me stronger.

When I was nine year old boy.my father usually took me to see
baseball games. From then on, I really like baseball. Besides, It's excellent
sport for Taiwan to play in the International. Therefore,the reason make
up my mind to support baseball of Taiwan forever. In addition, I have
other reason that I like baseball. Because playing baseball is good excise
and interesting.

In conclusion, I think baseball of Taiwan is essential. To sum up,
I must to keep my mind on baseball and support it.

Answer 1

My favorite sport is basevall. It is both interesting to watch and play.
註：任何運動都能幫助身體強壯，所以不說自明。
When I was a nine-year old boy, my father took me to watch many baseball games. From then on, I have become a baseball fan, I play and watch basefall games very often. As the baseball is popular in Taiwan, our baseball teams participate in many international games. It give me another reason of loving basefall.
註：你這一段問題在意思上的轉接很突兀，我把你改得順暢一些。
We all want Taiwan's baseball to become even more popular. Our teams will become champions of the world. Then we need give our best support to this national sport.
註：你的第三段結論重複已經說過的話，"In conclusion" 和 "sum up" 是完全一樣的意思。我幫你改寫後，感覺上比較像結論。

Answer 2

My Favorite Sport

My favorite sport is baseball. It's very interesting to play baseball and it does make me feel stronger.

When I was a young boy at nine years old, my father would take me to watch baseball games regularly. Then I decided to start playing baseball as I really enjoyed the games. Also, it's one of the great sports that Taiwanese could compete in the World Cup. That was another reason why I would like to support Taiwanese baseball teams as well. There are maybe other reasons why I like baseball, but as being so fascinating and a great exercise, I love playing baseball.

I believe that baseball is an essential sport to the people in Taiwan. I would really like to concentrate on how to play it better and be a good supporter for Taiwanese baseball team in the future.

把句子的排列和順序稍做了更動
讀起來才會順
你在文法和字彙上的運用需要加強
我儘量把意思保留
只變動句子的結構
希望對你有幫助哦
加油

Answer 3

我把你的原文複製下來
然後直接在裡面做修正唷...

My Favorite Sport
My favorite sport is baseball. I am interested in playing baseball and it makes me much stronger.

When I was nine-year-old boy,my father took me to see
the baseball games very often. From then on, I begin playing baseball and like it. Besides, It's an excellent
sport for Taiwan to play in the International competition. Therefore,the reason make
up my mind to support baseball of Taiwan forever. In addition, I have
another reason that I love baseball is that playing baseball is a good excrcise
and interesting.

In conclusion, I think baseball of Taiwan is essential and famous. To sum up,
I must to keep my mind on baseball and support it.

我做了這些修改
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