修改短篇英文文章的文法

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這是我的一篇英文作文, 煩請高手幫忙修改文法謝謝

A short note of BEAUTY
Beauty – a permanent search
Despite of poor English I really want to talk about Beauty. It is something deep inside me. But knowing words are limited and hope not to confuse you more. First at all, I would give a definition of what is beauty in my point of view. Beauty is the inner part of one’s soul that appears thoroughly through out all his or her body language. Face gesture that counts not a face itself. The gesture is the result of one’s thought and the face is the result of one’s gesture. Can we imagine if someone who has a beautiful face but terrible face gesture or even body language? We can be as beautiful as we want to be. It can be practiced and obtained through out our daily live. To Cultivate and cherish our soul first not the face. It doesn’t matter how much cosmetic we put on our face. It certainly will be vanished when time goes by. Self-confidence, attraction and satisfaction are all bound by one’s goodwill. Be real sincere and philanthropic act after that beauty will come. It will stay permanently and attract whoever needs it.

Meli

Answer 1

1. Despite of poor English I really want to talk about Beauty.

* Despite of my poor English, I relly want to talk about Beauty.

2. First at all, I would give a definition of what is beauty in my point of view.

* First of all, I would give a definition of what beauty is from my point of view.

3. It can be practiced and obtained through out our daily live.

* It can be practiced and obtained through our daily life.

4. To Cultivate and cherish our soul first not the face.

* It's the soul that we should cultivate and cherish foremost, not the face.

5. Be real sincere and philanthropic act after that beauty will come.

* Be a really sincere person and do philanthropic acts from time to time, then the beauty will sure to appear naturally.

6. It will stay permanently and attract whoever needs it.

* It will never fade away and will attract whoever appreciates this graceful quality.

Your article is pretty good, however, I find some grammatical errors and then make some alterations for you.


Hope my advice works!

Answer 2

Grace did a good job, and here is what I can add:

Say either,
"Despite poor English, I reaaly...about English,"
or,
"In spite of poor English, I really...English."

2007-11-16 09:39:33 補充：
Both "despite of" and "in despite of" seem not to be standard for native speakers, as discussed in the following link:

http://forum.wordreference.com/showthread.php?t=45568