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Question

Accroding to statistics,american of 61% assents their government should

support Taiwan into UN.

But if the really happened,China must attack Taiwan.That's without a dou

bt.So if you're one of them whom assents Taiwan into UN,Have you gay

s ever thinks about maybe America will embroiled in this war?

If America helps Taiwan to against China,That will be a very very fearful

thing,more than Vietnam War and operation iraqi freedom.

Do You Still Agree Taiwan Becames Independent?


這則文章將會在美國進行一項美國人民的意見調查分析

研究所的報告要用的 但是我們這組的英文很差 所以來這邊請大家

幫我們"審文"原則上是希望不要讓老外看出這不是美國人寫的文章

比較不會被質疑這篇文章的意義何在 謝謝

Answer 1

Accroding to survey , 61% of american support their government to let Taiwan into UN.

did it happen, China would attack Taiwan eventually. That's out of question. So if you're one of supporters ,what will you think that America will be involved in this conflict?

If America helps Taiwan against China, it will be a very very terrible

thing, more than Vietnam War and iraqi operation.

are You Still Agree that Taiwan Becames Independent?*****

Answer 2

下列所有句型與用字，皆已透過Google查詢比對美國網站，證實用字遣詞符合美式英文習慣。
According to a survey, 61% of Americans agree that the U.S. Government should support Taiwan to apply for UN membership. However, China may therefore invade Taiwan and Americans would again be involved in another war besides the one in Iraq. If this stands true, would you still agree that Taiwan should declare its independence?

Answer 3

According to survey of public opinions showed that 61% of Americans
is in favor of their government to support "Taiwan into UN".

However, if such conduct would result in the war between Taiwan Strait:
China would attack Taiwan without doubt.

The supporters of "Taiwan into UN" is to be questioned ever put
into consideration whether Americans would embroil the war between
Taiwan Strait.

The war between Taiwan Strait is much larger and more fearful than
Vietnam War and the Iraqi War that Americans are surely reluctant to get involved.

Not to mention China is the world's biggest market and American's partner in many aspects.

Taiwan is risky ourselves in a war without partnership of Americans if we hastily bring the issue of "Taiwan into UN"

Therefore it remains a big question if you still insist independency ofTaiwan rather to the status quo.

Answer 4

According to statistics, 61% of American thinks that their government
should support Taiwan into UN.
But if that is really the case, China would attack Taiwan without doubt.
If you are the one who supports Taiwan into UN, have you ever think
that America will probably embroil in this war?
If America help Taiwan to fight against China,it will be more fearful than
Vietnam War and the Iraqi War.
With the thought of all these problems,do you still agree that Taiwan
should be independent?