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林　武　憲　國　語　兒　歌　研　究
Research on Lin, Wu-Hsien's Mandarin Children's Songs
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Abstract
林武憲為國內知名兒童文學作家，致力於兒童詩歌的創作、評論、語言研究以及閩南語教學的推廣，目前擔任兒童文學學會監事。長期從事小學教育工作，使林武憲的作品更貼近兒童，更符合兒童的需要。其兒歌作品數量豐富，在國語兒歌部分集結成冊的有《我來說你來猜》、《一步一步慢慢來》、《我愛ㄅㄆㄇ》、《嘰哩呱啦》、《我愛123》、《三隻老駱駝》、《請你猜》、《好寶寶》、《鵝追鵝》、《菜呀菜》、《安安上學》、《十二月水果歌》、《新安安上學》等。

Lin, Wu-Hsien is a famous writer on children's literature in Taiwan, devoted himself to the writing, commenting and language study of children's songs (用poetry 是否較恰當 ?) as well as to the promoting of Taiwanese teaching. Currently, he is the supervisor of Children's Literature Association. Lin has been engaged in teaching in primary school for a long time; therefore, his work is (是否改成 his works are) easily accepted by children and meets children's need. He composes lot of children's songs (請檢查是否用 nursery rhymes較正式?), such as “Guess & Guess”, “Make it Slowly”, “I Love Bo Po Mo”, “Gabble Jabber”, “I Love 123”, “Three Old Camels”, “You Guess”, “Good Kids”, “Geese Play”, “Vegetables”, “An An Goes to School”, “Monthly Fruit Song”, “New An-An Goes to School” and so on.

Answer 1

Lin, Wu-Hsien is a famous writer on children's literature in Taiwan, devoted himself to the writing, commenting and language study of children's songs (用poetry 是否較恰當 ? <仍然是songs較妥>) as well as to the promoting of Taiwanese teaching. Currently, he is the < is the 改為 is one of the > supervisor < supervisor改為大寫複數的 Supervisors > of Children's Literature Association. Lin has been engaged in teaching in primary school for a long time; therefore, his work is (是否改成 his works are <是的>) easily accepted by children and meets < meets 改為 meet > children's need. He composes lot < composes lot 改為完成式 has composed a lot > of children's songs (請檢查是否用 nursery rhymes較正式? <仍然是songs較妥，與上面的寫法一致> ), such as < , such as 改為 of which his albums written in Mandarin include, among others, >“Guess & Guess”, “Make it Slowly”, “I Love Bo Po Mo”, “Gabble Jabber”, “I Love 123”, “Three Old Camels”, “You Guess”, “Good Kids”, “Geese Play”, “Vegetables”, “An An Goes to School”, “Monthly Fruit Song”, “New An-An Goes to School” and so on.

2007-06-16 19:51:52 補充：
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Mandarin include, among others, 要改為 Mandarin, among others, include

Answer 2

Lin, Wu-Hsien is a famously renowned writer of children's literature in Taiwan who has been a successful creative writer of Children's Literature, book critic, language researcher and has also successfully established Taiwanese Language education; currently posing as a counsel for Children's Literature Association.

Engaging in educating primary school students for such a long time that has profoundly enhanced his work much closer to meet children’s demand. He composes lots of children's songs, such as “Take A Guess”, “Make It Slow”, “I Love Bo Po Mo”, “Gabble Jabber”, “I Love 123”, “Three Old Camels”, “You Guess”, “Good Baby”, “Gooses Chase”, “Veggies”, “An An Goes to School”, “Monthly Fruits Song”, “New An-An Goes to School” …etc.