請幫修改短文寫作~ 題目:回家途中,看到一隻流浪狗

Question

On the way home, Ray saw a homeless dog breaking at the park. He played with her for one hour, and then she tagged along after Ray. She was so cute that he took her home. At the same time, he not only built the house but also gave her as much dog food as possible every day for living. After one month she was not a cur, she became a pretty pet.

1.so...that的句型不是這樣用的
2.但是..gave her as much food as HE CAN?
首先謝謝你的回答
請是否解釋一下 為什麼不行,針對上面兩點.

Answer 1

On the way home, Ray saw a homeless dog BAKING IN the park.
[你可以用on the way,因為你主詞在後面。我不確定你的breaking是什麼意思，如果你指的是正在叫的狗..你的文法是對的! 整句可以是 Ray saw a homeless dog who is baking in the park (who, is可以同時省略)。park是用in the park.]....中間都沒有太大的錯誤...she tagged along after Ray [其實你用tagged已經有尾隨的意思，但是你這樣寫不算錯]。 RAY TOOK THE DOG HOME BECAUSE SHE IS SO CUTE. [語意上這樣比較通順，so...that的句型不是這樣用的]...接下來都對,但是..gave her as much food as HE CAN....ONE MONTH LATER, SHE IS NOT A CUR ANYMORE.

大致上是這樣語意文法都會比較明確

2007-06-11 22:43:32 補充：
so that 可以有很多用法，常見的有2種
1. so that 連在一起，有表達目的的用法.像在敘述自己這樣做的原因
I'll take my umbrella so that I won't get wet.

2. so + Adjective + that 表達因果關係.
She speak so fast that I can't understand.

至於你的第二個問題..原則上as..as 中間不會用到名詞

Answer 2

幫你修改一點點
這樣可能比較通順^^

on the way home, Ray saw a stray dog resting in the park. He played
with her for one hour, and she also ran after him. She was so cute so he took her home. At the same time, Ray built a house for her and also gave her the dog food as much as possible every day. After month, she was not a cur anymore but became a pretty pet.

Answer 3

On HIS way home, Ray saw a homeless AND BARKING dog at the park. He played with her ABOUT AN hour, then she CAME along WITH Ray. BECAUSE She was so cute , he took her home. he not only built the DOG- house but also gave her dog food as much as possible every day . After one month she became a pretty pet.