可以幫我訂正英文resume嗎? 急 文法與格式

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可以幫我訂正英文resume嗎? 急 文法與格式
Resume

Thank you to give me this chance to introduce myself. My name is xxx.
I am gradated from XXXUniversity　majored in Business English.

To be the only child in my family grew along, I learn to Take care, myself and solve problems very young. Since 18 years ole I got the part-time job after school in the restaurant for years. The work experience coach me learn independent and co-work with members.

I am outgoing and enjoyed to contact with people, that also make me had excellent perforce to be market representative. My working attitude is to do everything possible to obtain the fulfillment from it. So I love to get challenge and match the target.


However I am not a double A student graduated from famous school. But my values are that a person's key to success does not only in the professional knowledge. Attitude that the ones that persist in but the skill do things the attitude can change a person's habit, used to changed after changing life

I desire to get a chance to introduce myself and also learn more about company ,hope to have the pleasure of your granting me an interview.
Thank you.

Answer 1

I am XXX, a graduate from YYY University, majoring in Business English.
Growing up as the only child in my family, I have learned how to take care of myself and solve problems independently, while the experience of a part time job at a restaurant for years since 18 has showed me what team work is all about. I am outgoing and enjoy meeting people, which makes me a perfect candidate for a market representative. I believe in doing everything possible and finding fulfillment from within, and I love to take challenges and match targets. Though not a straight-A student from a renowned school, I am convinced that the key to success lies in not only professional knowledge but the attitude that could make changes to one's life.
I am hopefully looking forward to an interview to learn more about you company and further introduce myself.
Thanks for your time.

*很抱歉上回沒幫上忙. ^_^

Answer 2

Thank you for giving me this chance to introduce myself. My name is xxx.
I am gradated from XXX University majored in Business English.

To be the only child in my family grew along, I’ve learnt to take care of myself and solve problems when I was very young. I got my first part-time job after school in the restaurant for years on my age of 18. The work I’ve experienced enables me to be independent and makes cherish friendship with co-works.

I am outgoing and enjoy getting along with people. This also makes me to be excellent perforce as a marketing representative. My working attitude is to do everything possible to obtain the fulfillment from it. Therefore, I love to get challenge and reach the target.


However, I am not a double A student graduated from famous school. I believe my values are that a person's key to success does not only in the professional knowledge. (Attitude that the ones who persist in but the skill do things the attitude can change a person's habit, used to changed after changing life)這邊我看不懂，不曉得怎麼改

I am looking forward to getting a chance to introduce myself and also learn more about company. Hopefully to have the pleasure for granting an interview in the nearly future.

Thank you for your time.

Answer 3

Thank you for giving me a chance to introduce myself.
My name is xxx. I am gradated from XXX University and
majored in Business English.

As the only child in my family, I learned to take care
of myself and to solve problems at a very young age.
Since 18, I got a part-time job after school in the
restaurant for years. The work experience coached me
to be independent and to work with others.

I am outgoing and enjoy contacting people, it also makes
me perfectly suitable for being a market representative.
My working attitude is to do everything possible to
obtain the fulfillment from it. So I love to take
challenges and match against the target.

However I am not a double A student graduated from a
famous school. But my values are that the key to success
is more than professional knowledge. It’s attitude but
skills that changes a person’s habit and life.

I sincerely hope to have a chance to introduce myself more
and also to learn more about your company. If you would
kindly grant me an interview, your help will be greatly
appreciated.

Thank you for your time.