誰能幫我修改文章中錯誤的文法?

Question

What is greenhouse effect?

In this convenient city, we always think how to make more money that we can be richer. But, have you ever discovered a big problem? The earth is sick and very weak. I want to tell you what happened. The greenhouse effect is a term that refers to a physical property of the Earth's atmosphere. If the Earth had no atmosphere, its average surface temperature would be very low of about -18℃ rather than the comfortable 15℃ found today. This is the “Natural Greenhouse Effect”. You should know these movies “the day after to-morrow” and “the inconvenient truth”. Both of these movies tell use if global warming takes place, sea level will rise due to two different processes. First, warmer temperature cause sea level to rise due to the thermal expansion of seawater. Second, water from melt-ing glaciers and the ice sheets of Greenland and the Antarctica would also add water to the ocean. It is predicted that the Earth's average sea level will rise by 0.09 to 0.88 m between 1990 and 2100. Human is a killer of environment. Do you know why? We build as stars as factories. And cut down many trees. In Arctic regions, iceberg is fewer and fewer, the worst of all; even people said they found some polar bears had dead in the Artic Ocean. The murder is global warming. You might say” it is not my business “or
“ I don't know what can I do? ” After all, the problem is happened. We should to notice this issue and try to change our disadvantage. Australia is a model. Since 1998, bicycle sales have doubled in Australia. The reasons for this crazy include the growing problem of rinsing petrol costs and air pollution. They want to cut down on harmful gases. I thought we can follow them. If the weather's temperature is not very high, we shouldn't open the air conditional. We can get closer to nature and dry hair with a blower. To do re-cycle sounds a good idea, isn't it. Recycle
No matter who you are, you can try to grow a plant several months.

Answer 1

錯字﹕to-morrow-->tomorrow, use-->us, melt-ing-->melting, air conditional-->air-conditioner, re-cycle-->recycle
文法﹕
1. water from "melt-ing glaciers and the" ice sheets of Greenland and .....==>water from "melting glaciers, the" ice sheets of Greenland and ....
2. We build as "stars as factories. And"...==>We build as "many factories as stars and"...(受詞要擺在兩個as的中間)
3. iceberg is fewer and fewer==>icebergs are getting fewer and smaller(fewer是用於可數的東西﹐所以主詞不該用單數)
4. they found some polar bears "had dead"==>they found some polar bears "dead" 或 they found some polar bears "had died"(have後面不可接形容詞)
5. I don't know what "can I do?"==> I don't know what "I can do."(主要子句+名詞子句)或 I don't know, what can I do?(兩個獨立的句子)
6. the problem "is happened".==>the problem "happened".
7. We should "to notice"==>We should "notice"(助動詞後面要接動詞原形不可結不定詞)
8. try to change our "disadvantage".==> try to change our "behavior". 或 try to change our "way of life".
9. The reasons for this "crazy" include==>The reasons for this "crazy phenomena" include
10. I thought we can follow them==>I thought we could follow them(子句的時態必須與主要子句一致)
11. we shouldn't "open the air conditional".==>we shouldn't "turnon the air-conditioner".(在英文裡﹐開動電器要用“turn on”﹐而不是“open”)或以use取代open.

12. "Recycle No" matter who you are==>"Recycle, no" matter who you are
13. grow a plant "several" months==>grow a plant "every several" months(每隔幾個月)

2007-05-19 10:47:26 補充：
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Answer 2

樓上的早早就把工作完成了
而且做的盡善盡美
別人也差不上手
可是這未板大ㄚ~
好像粉久不上網
大概已經忘記自己PO過發問ㄌ
網路上就是有這種不負責任的ㄙㄨ臘
把花問當兒戲
把回答隨意丟棄
~~~~~偶來打報不平~~~~

Answer 3

我沒全部看啦,
但你最後ㄧ段第ㄧ行有一明顯錯誤,
應該" the problem happened" 才對, 要用主動.