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Question

原句-By combining these elements,artists like Ray Charles influenced the direction of R&B and made it what we know it as today.
雷.查爾斯等歌手將這些元素組合起來,影響了節奏藍調的發展方向,
使它成為今日我們知道的型態.

我的寫法-
Artists like Ray Charles put these elements together which affected how
R&B developed,making it a form that we all know today.

請問就語意上是否正確
是否有字義上的缺失呢?

Answer 1

基本上是可以的(only from my opinion), 只是我改變一些,作為參考

Artists like Ray Charles , who put these elements together, affected how the R&B developed and made it to the form that we know today.

Answer 2

很好啊!

本人會用:
contributed towards 取代 affected
making it the form 取代 making it a form
...比較順而已