作文如下↓
This year, I have a fine winter vacation, I often go out with classmate to play basketball, or find classmate to the home to play together.
In this year, dad and mom brings me to round Taiwan to play everywhere, we played a lot of things, also eating a lot of things, we play of very happy.
This winter vacation homework isn't a lot of, I write a little everyday, writing to finish very fast, so I can play heartily.
麻煩幫我看看有沒有寫錯，或者還可以加哪些東西，謝謝。
2007-02-15 21:57:31 · 6 個解答 · 發問者 23 1 in 社會與文化 ➔ 語言
This winter vacation homework isn't a lot of, I write a little everyday, writing to finish very fast, so I can play heartily.
2007-02-15 21:58:41 · update #1
問題很多呢。
介係詞和文法以及字的用法就錯了不少（像find應該是「找到」人，找人來家裡用invite比較好；bring是帶來的意思，帶什麼人去哪裡應該用take......）。時態要用過去式，而且通常時間和地點都放在句尾。文中Chinese English太多，如we play of very happy（我們玩得很高興？）。最後兩句我實在看不太懂。
至於可以加哪些東西......你可以介紹你請同學去你家做什麼、你玩了什麼地方、吃了什麼東西。一篇文章要有看頭，就是要寫出讀者可能不知道或感興趣的地方，「玩很多」、「吃很多」這些句子都太籠統了。
擬修改如下：（如果有不合本意的地方，就請你自己斟酌）
I had a fantastic winter vacation this year. I often played basketball out-
doors with my classmates or invited them to my home and played together.
The most unforgettable part of my winter vacation was the trip around
Taiwan with my mom and dad. We traveled through a lot of scenary
spots, and tried a variety of food as well. We really had a wonderful time.
This winter vacation was not very long. I wrote little by little everyday
so that I would have plenty of time to play.
2007-02-16 04:16:15 補充：
不好意思，最後兩句應該是
There was not much homework during the winter vacation.
I did my homework little by little everyday and finished it very early.
So I had plenty of time to play.
2007-02-15 23:10:18 · answer #1 · answered by HSDaniel 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
吐血中ing (血流滿地了..............) 看久了不僅會傷眼睛 連英文都會退步呢
阿密陀佛 阿密陀佛 阿密陀佛 阿密陀佛！！！
2007-02-15 23:08:02 · answer #2 · answered by 櫃子【貓】 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I had a great winter vacation. My friends and I played basketball and hung out at my house.
This year, my parents and I traveled around in Taiwan. We had lots of fun sightseeing and eating
delicious food.
I did not have much homework during the break. I did some each day so I could finish it sooner and spend more time enjoying my vacation.
希望有幫助 :D
2007-02-15 23:04:04 · answer #3 · answered by 阿蔡 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
恭喜你！
這是非常非常非常標準的台式英語
加上完全不懂得什麼叫做＂時態＂
小朋友你今年幾歲啦？！
我在這裡要告訴你一個好消息和壞消息
好消息是：你進步的空間還很大喔！而且其實你單字都有拼對！
壞消息是：英文這條路對你還很漫長～你可能會走的很辛苦～
好好努力唷！加油～英文很重要！
2007-02-15 22:53:09 · answer #4 · answered by ? 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ㄟ...基本上呢...你這篇幾乎沒有對的地方耶
你要不要乾脆寫中文讓大家幫你翻算了，因為通篇都是錯誤，連改都不知道從何下手....
2007-02-15 22:34:40 · answer #5 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1.首先這是敘述寒假發生過的內容.所以全文都要以過去式寫
2.你的同學都藏在草叢裡嗎?不然為何要用find
3.吃很多事情?
4.a lot of不是這樣用的..
5.最後一個單字...不知道有沒有這個字
6.其他錯誤族繁不及備載...
總之整篇很好笑= ="
2007-02-16 03:14:19 補充：
最後那個字你應該是想說盡情地玩吧
用so i can enjoy my vacation to the full.
2007-02-16 04:11:09 補充：
下面那位美國高中生太好心了= ="
這樣人家就沒有自己學習的樂趣啦~~
不過還是比那些直接把作業丟上來的死小孩好一點..
2007-02-15 22:06:35 · answer #6 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋