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The little mermaid, who called Alice, in order to pursue the true love and happiness gave up her father king, seven elder sisters and bright voice. Alice drank the poison that witch gave to her, and then split fish's tail into the leg. She bore the great foot ache, setting her foot on the land to pursue the dream. But for the prince's happiness, she let herself turn into a foam finally. Those agonies which she bore quietly and dying, can not guarantee she can get the love that wish eagerly.
I think, it is the same too in real life. As you sow, so shall you reap, the ugly duckling may no grow into a swan. Perhaps there is not a repayment in the great sacrifice.
Although this is reality, is not it perfect that life need some?


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那段我想說的是

我想，人生也正是如此，種瓜未必得瓜，醜小鴨未必能成為天鵝。偉大的犧牲也可能沒有回報。雖然這事如此的現實,但人生不就是需要一點不完美嗎？

這段我有點不太會翻 vv"

Answer 1

The little mermaid, who called Alice, in order to pursue the true love and happiness gave up her father king, seven elder sisters and bright voice.
Correct: In order to pursue the true love and happiness, the little mermaid, Alice, left her father and seven elder sisters, and gave up her beautiful voice.

Alice drank the poison that witch gave to her, and then split fish's tail into the leg.
Correct: Alice's urosome split into 2 and became 2 legs after drinking the poison given by the witch.

She bore the great foot ache, setting her foot on the land to pursue the dream.
correct: She pursued her dream at the sacrifice of suffering the pain from her legs.

But for the prince's happiness, she let herself turn into a foam finally.
Correct: At the end, little mermaid jumped into the sea and became bubbles in order to make the prince have a happy life.

Those agonies which she bore quietly and dying, can not guarantee she can get the love that wish eagerly.
Correct:The pain she'd suffered couldn't promise her with a true love she'd chased.

I think, it is the same too in real life. As you sow, so shall you reap, the ugly duckling may no grow into a swan.
Correct: I think this kind of story happens in the real life every day. It is just like the story we read, the Ugly Duckling.

Perhaps there is not a repayment in the great sacrifice.
Correct: Perhaps there is no reward after we pay grea effort in doing something.


Although this is reality, is not it perfect that life need some?
Correct: ???? 不了你的意思, 你是說人生就是要有點缺陷的意思嗎?? 如果是,那就是
We are living in reality, though, life should come with defeats sometimes.

Answer 2

The little mermaid, who's called Alice, gave up her king father, seven elder sisters and her bright voice, in order to pursue true love and happiness . Alice drank the poison that witch gave to her, then split her fish tail into legs. She bore a great foot ache, setting her foot on the land to pursue her dream. But in order for the prince's happiness, she let herself turn into a foam in the end. Those agonies which she bore quietly and dying, don'tguarantee that she can get the love that wishes for so hungrily.
I think, it is the same too in real life. As you sow, you reap*. The ugly duckling may not be able to grow into a swan. Perhaps there might be no repayment when you sacrifice.
Although this is reality, is not it true that our life need some?*

很抱歉這麼說
但我覺得你錯很多ˊˋ
"*"的地方是我看不懂你的意思
我還有改一些地方讓它變的比較通順XD

如果還有問題來我部落格問吧...

2007-01-17 21:16:34 補充：
It's the same in real life.Although you sow seeds, you might not be able to collect them. The ugly duckling may not be able to grow into a swan. Perhaps there might be no repayment for your sacrifice.
Although this is reality, is not it true that our life can't be too perfect?
開頭家ithink會減弱你的意見^^

2007-01-17 21:19:00 補充：
Although this is reality, is it not true that our life can't be too perfect?
剛剛忘了改(汗) 也可以這樣
Although this is reality, isn't it true that our life can't be too perfect?

Answer 3

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in order to pursue the true love and happiness, gave up her father king,
加個逗號happiness, gave