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這是我自己編的對話，可以幫我檢查那兒有錯或是不通順嗎...

如果有，可以請幫我改正確的或是更通順的嗎?謝謝^^

1. A: I lived outside of school and hired a room of an apartment with my boyfriend! Ha Ha! I didn’t join any clubs in my school, actually I’d rather spend more time on my boyfriend. Ha, just kidding! Anyway! How about you, Angela?

2. A: How awful…in fact, I think the culture is very important, because all behaviors stand for the family education. By the way, I think that will be a chance to you to learn about how to get along with each other.

3. A: The most things I cannot get used to be is the way I spend money, for example, I lived outside of school, and everything costs an arm and a leg. My expenses are always larger than my income.

4. A: Absolutely you have to learn that, because you are too reliance. You cannot always rely on your parents, right?

5. A: Yeah! And there is a classmate whose birthday is the same as mine! How coincident! And we are the best friend now.

6. A: Oh…Vicky, I admire you for your practical training! It sounds like fun.

7. A: Hey, dears, you know what? I’m starving now…

後面3句比較短，有什麼方法家常但又不會影響之後的句子或語助詞嗎?如果有可以請幫我加嗎?謝謝!!!

出現亂碼= ="
所以我修改了一下，以下是亂碼的正確版!

1. I didn't join any clubs in my school, actually I'd rather spend more time on my boyfriend.

2. How awful...

6. Oh...

7. I'm starving now...

Answer 1

1.
A: I lived outside of school and rented an apartment room with my
boyfriend! Ha! Ha! I didn't join any clubs in my school and actually I
would rather spend more time with my boyfriend. Ha, just kidding!
Anyway! How about you, angela?


2.
A: How awful! In fact, I think that the culture is very important because
all your behaviors represent your family. By the way, I think that will be a chance for you to learn about how to get along with one another.

3.
A: The biggest thing which I cannot get used to is the way of spending money. For example, because of living outside of school, everything costs me an arm and a leg. My expenses are always more than my income.

4.
A: You absolutely have to learn that because you are to dependent. You cannot rely on your parent forever, right?

5.
A: Yeah! And there is a classmate whose birhtday is the same as mine! What a coincident! We are the best friends now.

6.
A: Oh, hello, Vicky! I feel very curious about your internship. It
sounds like fun.

7.
A: Hey! dear! You know what? I'm starving now.

有些是亂碼 所以只能揣測

2007-01-08 22:51:07 補充：
以上是修正過的內容

Answer 2

1. A: I lived "outside of school" (off campus) and "hired" (rent) a room "of" (in) an apartment with my boyfriend! Ha Ha! I didn’t join any clubs (不需要 s) in my school, actually I’d rather spend more time "on" (with) my boyfriend. Ha, just kidding! Anyway! How about you, Angela?

2. A: How awful…in fact, I think "the" (不必這個字) culture is very important, because "all behaviors stand for the family education"(這裡不懂你要說啥耶, 是說家庭教育影響個人行為嗎?那應為 all behaviors are influenced heavily by family tradition/culture). By the way, I think that "will be" (is) a chance "to" (for) you to learn about how to get along with each other.

3. A: The most things I cannot get used to be is the way I spend money, for example, I lived outside of school, and everything costs an arm and a leg. "My expenses are always larger than my income" (The amount I spend is always much more than my income).

4. A: Absolutely you have to learn that, because you are too reliance. You cannot always rely on your parents, right?

5. A: Yeah! And there is a classmate whose birthday is the same as mine! "How" (What a) coincident! And we are the best friend now.

6. A: Oh…Vicky, I "admire" (envy) you for your practical training! It sounds like fun.

7. A: Hey, dears, you know what? I’m starving now…

:) 希望對你有幫助, 不懂就問我吧

Answer 3

看沒人回答,我就我知道的來說
1.I lived off campus and rented a small apartment with my boyfriend.
''I didn't join any clubs in my school, actually I'd rather spend more tim e on my boyfriend. ''你這句沒有連接詞,是錯的.可改成''I didn't join any clubs in my school and, in fact, I'd rather spend more time hanging out
with my boyfriend.
2.In fact, I think the upbringing is very important to me,because what you do shows how the family education is.另外''how to get along with each other.''你應是指其他人,故''with people''應較好
4.Absolutely you have to learn that on you own, because you have to be Independent.
5.And we are best friends now.
我只能揣測你的中文原義,希望有幫到你