John's friends took place a party for him on his birthday.They decorated the livingroom and bought a big birthday cake for him.When John came back home, they hid behind the sofa. John's friends jumped out and shouted"surprise" to him.John was so happy.They sang "Happy Birthday" together,then,John cut the cake and his friends sent him lot of gift.
It was nice of his friends to do this for him.
請幫我看一下以上文章文法有沒有錯，及告知需改正的地方，謝謝
2006-12-26 14:46:28 · 3 個解答 · 發問者 Lydia 4 in 社會與文化 ➔ 語言
John's friends throwed a bithday party for him on his birthday.They decorated the his livingroom and bought a big birthday cake for John. His friends all hid behind the sofa and jumped out and shouted"surprise" when John came home at the door. John was so happy. They sang "Happy Birthday" together and John cut the cake and shared with his friends. He received a lot gifts on his birthday. It was nice of his friends to do this for him.
2006-12-26 16:03:09 · answer #1 · answered by gs71099 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1.用take place 我覺得有點不太對，應該用give a party to him 就可 以 了吧
2.came back 後面不要加to me會比較好一點
3.a lot of 不然就是lots of沒有lot of 的用法唷
4.最後gifts才對
2006-12-26 20:01:30 補充：
就像樓上大大說的come home不然就是come back 就好了
2006-12-26 14:59:34 · answer #2 · answered by 琬琪 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
John came back home
不用寫back
2006-12-26 14:57:18 · answer #3 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋